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Tramp Poet Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 754Could Be Anywhere... 
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Trickle Down Sitting on old, car seat throne surveying back yard kingdom. The rain comes suddenly with it’s giant drops that pock and drown the dry. Siam princess bobs and weaves her ears back and tail puffed. She jumps hunched, compacted dashing for cover. Little birds peeking from steel cave home chatter accusingly. Saying, “Oh Man, You giveth water, food, protect from Hawk... yet You allow our nests to wet?” Elvis, the so called weenie, wonder dog explores the diminishing dry. Turns suddenly ends almost meet as he dives back to safety. And yet, i rejoice as water flows, batters wetting smoke and filling cup. Watching the kingdom “Oh Death, where is thy sting?” laughing with the One who made me. bleeding... "Tis ink coming from his arm, Captain!" |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Very interesting.  |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
This was unusual enough to make me stop, read again, laugh and post a reply. This was good ~Heather |
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PhaerieChild Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787Aloha, Oregon |
I can see it all brother 'o' mine. Car seat, Fluff the princess, and Elvis. Great memories you invoke with this one. Love it lots!! Sis Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream. Shawna R. Holder Boise, Idaho |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
I like the relaxed style of your writing,it's got a good feel to it. Voted Best Wishes Jon |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
i voted for this one. but some of your other work i like more that i've read. but keep up your good work I'm the lord, I'm the havoc, I'm the soul |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Liked it muchly ! |
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Tramp Poet Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 754Could Be Anywhere... |
Thanks once again for all the input. bleeding... "Tis ink coming from his arm, Captain!" |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
mm... interesting.. yes definitley interesting ^_^ I like it.. not one of your best worke there bleeding, I have read some awesome poetry of yours.. so a poem as good as this almost is pushed into the shadows by such wonders.. ^^ I do like this tho.. By the way, uuh.. how do u vote for a poem?? do u have to go somewhere to place a vote, or do u do so by just replying?? Lynne "He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu |
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Broken_Winged_Angel Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 994Small Town, Somewhere |
 Hmm.. Very interesting.. It made me stop and re-read it again, just to make sure I got it the first time.. Brought a needed smile to my face. Thankyou.I awake to a world I don't want. There is no transition for me. I am in heaven. I am in hell. |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Yes, I like this. Quite a scene here you've played out for us, well done. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
an interesting style of writing, really enjoyed this poem. "I see myself as an intelligent, sensitive human, with the soul of a clown which forces me to blow it at the most important moments". Jim Morrison |
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Tramp Poet Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 754Could Be Anywhere... |
thank you all for your replies! Certainly helps to get some input. thanks again, bleeding... "Tis ink coming from his arm, Captain!" |
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kelieth Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 314Normal IL - USA |
Interesting piece and enjoyable. Look forward to more. Kevin "Anything is possible with patience, time is the tool use it to reach your goals." |
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