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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore 
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A joyous occasion it should be A whole family sitting down Cozily for dinner Yet all is silent except for the slurping of the soup and the occasional "Pass me the chilli sauce, please" All look intently at their plates, a fierce concentration almost intimdating as if their chicken chop may just turn glittering gold any time No one asks about my day No one shares interesting ancedotes about their day No one cracks silly jokes to lighten the sombere mood No one even smiles or winks Maybe in distance, but never in heart We connect You all are my family You all will be the ones to stay But do we really understand one another at all? Do we ever attempt to bridge the widening gap between us? |
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Esmeralda Ponsonby Member
since 2000-04-02
Posts 138 |
Wow, this is excellent writing. The message is sad though, and to think how many family's truly are like this. I feel you met the challenge well, nice job. [This message has been edited by Esmeralda Ponsonby (edited 06-26-2000).] |
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Dennis L. White Senior Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463Michigan, U.S.A. |
Kaile, Nice twist on the Challenge phrase! Well Done! Dennis :^) |
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Dennis L. White Senior Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463Michigan, U.S.A. |
Kaile, OOPS, My reply must of stuttered. LOL Dennis :^) [This message has been edited by Dennis L. White (edited 06-26-2000).] |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
A different twist on the phrase...Well Done!! This piece was a little sad...a family by blood but is it by ties?? Good piece!! Thanks for taking the challenge Kaile!!  Bridgette"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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kelieth Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 314Normal IL - USA |
Strong piece. Family's aren't always as close as it seems they should. Great job.  Kevin "Anything is possible with patience, time is the tool use it to reach your goals." |
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PrincessPoet Member
since 2000-04-15
Posts 133Long Beach, Calif. |
So close by blood, sadly so far apart short of disfunctional  and that'ssad rings very true n some families To be who u are and become what u are capable of is the only goal worth living. ~Alvin Ailey Poetry & Friendship PrincessPoet |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
thanx you all for replying and liking this...i wanted to try something different other than the love romance poetry and am glad that it went down so well |
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