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Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
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0 posted 2000-01-24 03:28 PM


Some things cannot be explained by verses that rhyme,
They are not measured by the commitment of time.
Some emotions run too deep to be described by words,
Forgiveness and understanding-remain the most beautiful words ever heard.

Janet Marie-11/14/99

Rain falls,
Night calls...
Lost in the missing you.

Time stands still,
Pain takes over my will...
Tears come-glistening in blue.

Heal my heart,
Loneliness depart...
Remembering promises made.

Living lessons learned,
Warmed by love returned...
Gifts of these moments in time.

Fate teaches the reasons,
God changes the Seasons...
Completed, I live in the light of this love.

Janet Marie 1/10/00


© Copyright 2000 Janet Marie - All Rights Reserved
deleeme
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since 1999-10-09
Posts 1766
NEW ENGLAND, USA
1 posted 2000-01-24 06:38 PM


Simple words, perhaps but sublime thoughts
worth the mention--Thank you Janet, for making the effort & taking the time to share them.  David


 "Our Creativity points to a Higher Creator--we couldn't have just happened, and for what ability we may possess--to God be the glory." -dlw-



Vincent Spaulding
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since 2000-01-16
Posts 59

2 posted 2000-01-25 04:32 AM


A good couple of poems.
I think the first one would read more easily if you divided the fourth line as follows:

Forgiveness and understanding remain
The most beautiful words ever heard.

The second poem is a treat to both the ears and the eyes.  The three line stanza works nicely.

ellie LeJeune
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since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156
King of Prussia, PA USA
3 posted 2000-01-25 06:34 AM


Janet; How gracefully this flows. I sense a very gentle spirit in you.

 02

SiO2
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since 2002-06-05
Posts 24
New Zealand
4 posted 2002-07-04 10:17 AM


Although I think the last line breaks the pattern I think you have a very succinct style and I like this poem a lot.
Thanks for all the info. on mine!

Mistletoe Angel
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5 posted 2002-07-04 11:01 AM




(smiles) Yes, yes, He will always bring blessings and light into every season for us all to behold just as every reason is juxtaposed within each one, in which the heart always can later interpret! (big hugggssssss) This is excellent, sweet friend, I LOVE IT, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Janet, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton


"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

[This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (07-04-2002 11:02 AM).]

Anonymity
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since 2002-06-11
Posts 45

6 posted 2002-07-04 11:23 AM


Simple words they may be but with strength and Inspiration that resound within my ears.  Wonderful Poem.
Marsha
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since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423
Maidstone Kent England
7 posted 2002-07-04 07:22 PM


JM darling girl this is full of light and wonder, simple words maybe but such beautifully penned ones, words that simply flow over my mind, really excellent writing here.

Wonderful writing, poetry doesn’t come a lot better than this. That first one is superb and the second Oh my word it is stunning in its simplicity. Excellent writing


Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy


Breathe through the heat of our desire
Thy coolness and they balm
Let sense be dumb let flesh retire
Speak through the eathquake wind and fire
Oh

Dulcinea
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since 2001-07-22
Posts 774
IN
8 posted 2002-07-05 11:21 AM


Sometimes the most simple words carry the most profound message, and it was not lost here! Superb writing Janet Marie! God Bless!
tracie66
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713
Australia
9 posted 2002-07-06 06:46 AM


Oh WOW!!! dear Janny girl these are both awesome writes. I loved both and was touched by both, well penned dear one
~HUGS~
Tracie~

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe



Mark Bohannan
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since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song
10 posted 2002-07-06 04:54 PM


I do believe that this is the calmest I have known you to be and you know I am loving seeing that side of you.  Simple words yet as complex as it gets until you accept the understanding without question.  Beautifully written and stated.  
Elizabeth Santos
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since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269
Pennsylvania
11 posted 2002-07-08 12:26 PM


Very equsire in its simplicity
Loved this!
Liz

MidnightSon
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since 2002-05-15
Posts 312
between the gutter & the stars
12 posted 2002-07-08 06:38 AM


some flames burn forever.

the first poem is wonderful. short, true...
i know you dig MB20, but if you don't have "gutterflower" from the goo goo dolls (or any goo goo album for that matter) pick it up. i think it's right up your alley.

your second reminded me:

"want to get free, talk to me.
i can feel you falling.
wanted to be all you need.
somehow here is gone."

enjoyed this blast from the past. always an inspiration and a pleasure.

it's our struggle for identity that leaves us all unknown

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

13 posted 2002-07-08 07:09 AM


Thank you everyone for your kind words to this write...its never easy to go back and look at our very early work, at least not for me...I hadnt seen that old second poem in a very long time..the first one is a "personal fave" for sentimental reasons of the inspire...but the things I learned and the heart-reasons that were behind these poems stay with me always.

thank you all again for your generosities.

jm

MidnightSon...you always find the right tunes
TY my friend...where have you been...good to see you back.

and Mark? I am always calm ...
I'm the calmest moth you know  

[This message has been edited by Janet Marie (07-08-2002 07:11 AM).]

Neeraja
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since 2002-06-22
Posts 812
The Netherlands
14 posted 2002-07-21 07:34 AM


This is so beaatiful!!!

Neeraja            

Larry C
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since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286
United States
15 posted 2002-07-21 12:36 PM


Janet Marie,
Now, I too have lived these words. I think you reposted just to feed me soul. Thank you dear friend, always.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

mycafe
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since 2002-05-23
Posts 584

16 posted 2002-07-25 01:29 AM


Simple words but done with magic...I esp. loved the last stanza, Janet.  *hugs*

mycafe

Keep counting your blessings

Dee
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since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330
Queensland, Australia
17 posted 2002-07-25 04:20 AM


Janet, you touched me with the simplicity and truth of both of these poems. Beautifully done. Definitely a keeper.

Love to you,
Dee

Stand straight and tall, not the reflection as others see you, but as you truely are.        Clearwater

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

18 posted 2002-07-25 11:01 AM


Neerja, Larry, mycafe and Dee-girlie...thank you for your heart felt replies and for allowing these to touch you...sometimes its the little things that we need reminding of...like I did of these old words of mine...thank you for allowing me to see them thru your eyes.  


Samantha G Kennedy
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since 2002-07-27
Posts 131
Kent England
19 posted 2002-07-29 08:48 PM


Love sure is the brightest light!!

your words shone here


beautiful!

Sammie

^i^

Elizabeth Santos
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since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269
Pennsylvania
20 posted 2002-07-30 12:05 PM


And you do, surely, live in the light of His love. It shows in your verses
LIz

bsquirrel
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since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855

21 posted 2002-07-30 03:06 PM


Yep, yr a poetry goddess, alright.

Said if I only could ...
-KB

One Arm
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since 2002-07-30
Posts 6
Ga.
22 posted 2002-07-30 05:27 PM


J.Marie: The first poem I was hoping to see the words I love you but forgiveness fits.  I can sense a struggle in the second poem but you bring all to a serene feeling in your last stanza. I thank-you for shining the Light of His Love...One Arm


baerlon
Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 197
Youngstown and East Liverpool, Ohio, USA
23 posted 2002-08-02 04:47 AM


These were amazing JM.  I noticed the date on the second, what took so long for you to share this one.  >:-(  jk  thx for sharing

There's a peace inside us all
Let it be your friend
It will help you carry on
In the end
There's a peace inside us all
-Creed

Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

24 posted 2002-08-02 07:23 AM


Samantha,  Dear Lizzie, Mike, One Arm and Bae ...
thank you so much for the generous replies.

Mike? me thinks these old beginners rhymes arent "goddess" worthy...but hopefully shows how a person can grow and learn here, reading so many talented poets.

One Arm...welcome to Passions... so nice to meet you.

HEY BAE .... wasnt holding out on you, I promise....look at the posting date of this....someone brought an oldie up...If my memory is any good..this was my second post here at Pips.

Thank you all again for finding something special in these older poems.

VAS
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450
Oregon
25 posted 2002-08-04 05:22 PM


Yep, Janet Marie, I like them both a lot!
I think the suggestion by Vincent S. is a good one, too.

The simple way the 2nd one falls onto the page and into the heart of the reader speaks volumes of your inspiration.

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Dee
Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330
Queensland, Australia
26 posted 2003-08-08 06:25 AM


Just wandering through the archives again. It is so easy to get lost in here

D

Stand straight and tall, not the reflection as others see you, but as you truely are.        Clearwater

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