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Hallucination
Member

since 2001-03-18

Posts 419

0 posted 2001-04-11 03:40 PM

The sleepless shadows rises from the streets
of this silent town
the smoke turns to stone
and falls to the ground
the greener grass doesn't excist when you're all alone

The sleepless shadows have painted
the sky deadly black
the sun
is disapering covered in blood
The cold breeze of the night
touches my hair

The sounds from sleepless shadows
makes me nervouse
I'm so scared that no one will hear me scream
no one will hear me cry my heart out
for that some one I love

Stephanos

Member Elite

since 2000-07-31

Posts 3618
Statesboro, GA, USA

1 posted 2001-04-13 03:29 PM

This is a haunting poem.

I hope you find a true love that will bring some light to dispell the darkness.

Stephen.

Lighthousebob
Member Elite

since 2000-06-14

Posts 4725
California

2 posted 2001-04-13 11:58 PM

hallucination,

I hear you!!!! I know that I'm too old to hang out at teen poetry but I broke the rules and read many of your poems over there anyway. You are a very mature, emotional and descriptive poet. I believe it is true that the young men shall dream dreams. I believe that you are given these dreams for a purpose. I am confident that once she arrives into your life that you will totally understand that she was not just an hallucination but the woman of your dreams.

God Bless You My Friend, Bob <><

obscurity of cloud
Member

since 2001-05-11

Posts 294
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3 posted 2001-05-12 03:22 PM

"the smoke turns to stone
and falls to the ground"

that's a really great image; i have this fascination with imagery from smoke. This is full of tenebrity, but i like it. Keep posting!

"so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost

Mabel A. Dilley
Senior Member

since 2001-03-17

Posts 859
Seattle, WA, USA

4 posted 2001-05-12 05:56 PM

How quickly smoke falls into stone when walled up in a prison of doubt. Your worth is accounted for within this universe...please...walk on the newly mowed grass and sit a spell. Shalom...Julian

"I am not now that which I have been."

Trillium

Member Patricius

since 2001-03-09

Posts 12098
Idaho, USA

5 posted 2001-05-12 06:31 PM

God will hear you even if no one else does!

Betty Lou Hebert

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