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gidget7 Member
since 2000-08-12
Posts 52Arkansas, USA |
ok, I dont know who all will remember the song, but when I was younger(boy I hate saying that)there was a song called Heaven,sort of a Pop/Rock song. I wrote this while listening to that song, and I have it up on my site, but wanted ya'll opinion on it. Please be honest, and have a God day. At a time in my life when I lost control I've wanted to turn my life around, I looked and found no way out Then Jesus came into my soul He forgave me of my sin, it's been washed away And now I belong to Him, Jesus you're all that I need I welcome you into my heart though I find it hard to believe I'm worth savin' And Jesus you're all that I want I ask you to rule my heart I truely believe You're my Saviour In each of our lives we've done some wrong said things we shouldn't say, did things we shouldn't do. But Jesus is there , to call upon He will be there for you for eternity you will never be alone Jesus you're all that I need I ask you into my heart Though I find it hard to believe I'm worth savin' And Jesus you're all that I want I ask you to rule my heart, I truely believe You're my Saviour. I have been lonely far too long wandering in despair Then you reached to me, and now I can see That you'll always be there So I will live my life through you. Written and copyrighted by : Kim Clayton |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Good work! These are some beautiful lines. The song must have been quite good too. I don't know how you could write poetry while listening to music with lyrics. You've got a gift there. I always get too distracted, lol. This poem is great. Never forget that Jesus can forgive ANY sin. I know this from experience. God bless, and keep up the good work! |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
 The content on someone coming to Jesus Christ is always a good subject in my opinion. I think that I would leave a space at the beginning and the ending of your repeated lines like a chorus...At a time in my life when I lost control I've wanted to turn my life around, I looked and found no way out Then Jesus came into my soul He forgave me of my sin, it's been washed away And now I belong to Him, Jesus you're all that I need I welcome you into my heart though I find it hard to believe I'm worth savin' And Jesus you're all that I want I ask you to rule my heart I truely believe You're my Saviour In each of our lives we've done some wrong said things we shouldn't say, did things we shouldn't do. But Jesus is there , to call upon He will be there for you for eternity you will never be alone... Jesus you're all that I need I ask you into my heart Though I find it hard to believe I'm worth savin' And Jesus you're all that I want I ask you to rule my heart, I truely believe You're my Saviour. I have been lonely far too long wandering in despair Then you reached to me, and now I can see That you'll always be there So I will live my life through you. Just a sugestion, Bob <>< |
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gidget7 Member
since 2000-08-12
Posts 52Arkansas, USA |
That's great, thanks, I had intended it to be as a song, only I have never written one before so I had no idea how it was done. Thank you very much. |
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