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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Whispering rain With the coming of the dawn, Falls the whispering rain reborn. Soothing sounds in sweeping fall, Swallows the sonance nightly call. Lenient wood winds gently flow, Quiet percussions very low. Wetting down the swaying grain, Drinking up the gentle rain. Rampant clouds in careless dare, Phasing out the suns aware, Layering under mornings light, Bringing back the secret night. Blowing in the braking dawn, Wetting down the misty morn. Sharing all in brewed accord, In compassionate reward. And in the rains slurring whisper Blew the droplets hitting crisper, Changing mist to rain in flight, Causing echoes through the night. No mothers care in satisfy, Could sing a sweeter lullaby. |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Beautiful, Seymour. I could feel the gentle rain and hear its melody! Thank you. ------------------ Denise |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Loved this Seymour  ------------------ What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Seymour you have it pegged. I too can hear the rain. ------------------ Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© ------------------------------------------------------- "Either kill me or take me as I am, because I'll be damned if I ever change..." Count Donatien Alphonse Francois de Sade (Marquis de Sade) |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Sy, The sweetest sound to ever hear Is rain's most delicate morning tear To gently hit the waiting pane And play life's rhythm once again It is a lullaby so sweet To put my weary soul to sleep Words exquisite such as these Put my weary mind at ease Such a beautiful poem Elizabeth |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I absolutely love the rain Seymore, thanks for the beautiful poem that depicts the magic of it so well. |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Sy, the rain may fall but your star is rising every day. This one is a pleasure. |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
This brings a beautiful feeling of peace to my heart Sy....I especially like the last two lines..... Lovely....... ------------------ A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
It's raining as I read this gem, Sy... |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
That is cool....I can hear the rain!! It sounds like a poem about Oregon!! I have recently moved to the land of rain!! Thanks!! Bridgette ------------------ "It may take a boy to turn a girl's head, but it takes a man to turn a girl's heart." |
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lostboy Member
since 1999-11-21
Posts 275New Hampshire, USA |
This was the scene at my house last night and what I woke to this morning, quiet rain, surrounded by the woods. I love that and loved the poem. Thanks for that image |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
To all the people up above You have rained on me with all your love I'm soaked and wet down to the skin. And can't explain the warmth within Your words have raind a wet enthrall God knows I really love you all. |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
We love you too, Seymour!! ------------------ Denise |
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Julie Senior Member
since 1999-08-20
Posts 739Houston, TX |
Seymour, your words so musical...so beautiful. Absolute perfection here. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Denise and Julie, May the gentle rain Bless your window pane. *L* |
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Ohme Senior Member
since 1999-07-17
Posts 816Texas |
I listened to the rain as well. ------------------ Yesterday is history, tomorrow just a mystery. And if today is good to me how could I ask for more? |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Sy, I always thought my favorite poet A Frenchman who wrote heavenly words And made a line of poetry Most beautious music ever heard He wrote of raindrops in his heart And pluttering on the roof above With words that sounded just like rain For this his poetry I love But now I see his glory fade For cometition can outdo For you create a masterpiece And now I am in awe of you Elizabeth |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, Your rain of words upon my head Has blown it up beyond its stead. I've never been told of things so bold For they seem to me words of gold. All I see are fields of clover And my cup surely runith over. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Oh Sy - whispering rain like the sound of silk. This is very lovely work. |
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mirjam Member
since 1999-11-24
Posts 246Auckland, New Zealand |
i probably sound like i'm repeating everyone else but i loved this - it reminded me of the mornings i wake up to the sound of gentle rain and it's a cosy feeling all curled up in bed - defintely agree that this gave me a sense of peace. You are amazing with your rhymes Seymour!!! |
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ThUnDeRkYsS Senior Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 727Wisconsin |
"No mothers care in satisfy, Could sing a sweeter lulluby" I love this line Sy... And who to paint a better view of what you speak, than only you You've proven time and time again 'none else to match your style my friend A work of art you've posted here for all to read, and hold so dear. Outstanding Sy ------------------ Life is what you make of it... Not what you let it be |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Sound of raindrops from the pen Would break the heart of Paul Verlaine [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 11-29-1999).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Severn, It seems like silk But really milk. *L* Mirjam, You comment was neat I heard the beat. thank you. ThUnDeRkYsS, I thank you for your poem and puff, I also really like your stuff. Thank you. Lizz, Your mind's as sharp As a candle in the dark *L* |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
Let me sneak in here and say how beautiful this is! Sy, magic rains from your pen ------------------ It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain |
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