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She Looked At You
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She Looked At You |
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Sunshine
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She Looked At You She stood quite quiet, she emoted cool just one look at her, yes, nobody’s fool; her temper soothing, her demeanor so calm she was restful to see, no uttered qualm… But when she looked at you… First, you’re taken in by her eyes of green fine lined wrinkles of smiles often seen and straight-away she gazes at you so steadily right back into your eyes, as your soul she sees… Next, her body is perfect, for a woman her age, you can see she’s been hugged, perhaps walked a stage; no airs nor swagger, nor feminine wiles she’s solid, not stolid, she’ll go many more miles. But when she looked at you… There was something about her, it was in the air not a forbidden scent no, something beyond compare, yes, something about her, yes, you may think… ah, it was when she caught your soul, with her quiet wink. She stood there poised, but just on the brink she watched your face, and knows what you think; quiet contemplation, with face quite serene but the wink brought forth to mind, a laughing queen. So when she looked at you… She made you quite pleased to be in the same room you caught yourself without your ever present gloom, she lit up your life, more than you liked to think, from all that she gave you, one quick little wink. 22 November, 1999 ©KRJ ------------------ Sunshine Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow [This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 11-23-1999).] |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Lovely Sunshine, just lovely. |
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DMBfan New Member
since 1999-11-21
Posts 2 |
very nice poem. I really like it. |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
I echo Severn Sunshine...... It is simply lovely! ------------------ A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! [This message has been edited by Pepper (edited 11-22-1999).] |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sunshine - This is so pretty. It's just so pretty. Did I mention that it's so very pretty? I think I like it very much. Very, very much. ------------------ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Severn, Pepper, I think this fits us well... DMB, thank you for coming in, and welcome to Passions... Marge, you're cracking me up! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Sever....wonderfully written  |
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Sunshine
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Thanks, Hoot. |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
 Just a wink...Wars have started over less. Beautifully written.------------------ Once I was brilliant, now I no longer shine, but the twinkle in my eye speaks of another time. |
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Sunshine
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Thank you, RE. You are quite right. {~,^} |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
really really like this sunshine, beautiful read |
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Sunshine
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Thank you, ILI...it likes me, too! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is great, Sunshine... Well done! |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Suthern, as I face south, I curtsy. Thank you. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
[This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 11-23-1999).] |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
Great poem. Liked this one, Sunshine! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
When she looked at me. . .she saw you with this poem excellent Sven ------------------ comme toujours |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Sunshine this was really neat! Very well done! Some just have that gift, that you can feel when you walk into a room. |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
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This is beautiful, Sunshine! Very well written! ------------------ Denise |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Joy, Sven, Whtdove, Denise...I am overwhelmed at the responses this has received, as well as Marge's personal e-mail to me. Thank you ALL so very much. Perhaps this one is a keeper. ------------------ Sunshine Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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lostboy Member
since 1999-11-21
Posts 275New Hampshire, USA |
A definite keeper Sunshine!! Eye contact can be sooo much more than a simple exchange. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sunshine - I read this again, as it is one of my favorites now that my daughter has decreed that she sees ME in it. What a wonderful compliment to this mom. I hope you will be pleased to know that she has printed it out to share with the family. I mean ... this is really a wonderful descriptive writing. Thank you sooooo much for sharing. ------------------ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
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LostBoy, Marge, these are the best compliments. My sun is shining. Thank you. |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Sunshine it's been awhile since I've been around to read your poetry!! This is one of my favorites from you!! I could picture this, and it made me smile!! Very cool!! Thanks... Bridgette ------------------ "It may take a boy to turn a girl's head, but it takes a man to turn a girl's heart." |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
pleasantly surprised! Beautiful and yes, surely a keeper. Nice work here, Sunshine. |
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Sunshine
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Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Justbleu, Sally, I am still amazed at the positive response this little piece has continued to garner. Thank you so very much for your lovely comments. Indeed, this one will be a keeper! |
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