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0 posted 1999-11-22 05:19 PM


She Looked At You

She stood quite quiet, she emoted cool
just one look at her, yes, nobody’s fool;
her temper soothing, her demeanor so calm
she was restful to see, no uttered qualm…

But when she looked at you…

First, you’re taken in by her eyes of green
fine lined wrinkles of smiles often seen
and straight-away she gazes at you so steadily
right back into your eyes, as your soul she sees…

Next, her body is perfect, for a woman her age,
you can see she’s been hugged, perhaps walked a stage;
no airs nor swagger, nor feminine wiles
she’s solid, not stolid, she’ll go many more miles.

But when she looked at you…

There was something about her, it was in the air
not a forbidden scent no, something beyond compare,
yes, something about her, yes, you may think…
ah, it was when she caught your soul, with her quiet wink.

She stood there poised, but just on the brink
she watched your face, and knows what you think;
quiet contemplation, with face quite serene
but the wink brought forth to mind, a laughing queen.

So when she looked at you…

She made you quite pleased to be in the same room
you caught yourself without your ever present gloom,
she lit up your life, more than you liked to think,
from all that she gave you, one quick little wink.

22 November, 1999
©KRJ

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Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow



[This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 11-23-1999).]

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Severn
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1 posted 1999-11-22 10:07 PM


Lovely Sunshine, just lovely.
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2 posted 1999-11-22 10:09 PM


very nice poem. I really like it.
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3 posted 1999-11-22 10:19 PM


I echo Severn Sunshine......
It is simply lovely!

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[This message has been edited by Pepper (edited 11-22-1999).]

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4 posted 1999-11-22 11:42 PM


Sunshine -
This is so pretty.
It's just so pretty.
Did I mention that it's so very pretty?
I think I like it very much.
Very, very much.

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5 posted 1999-11-23 09:05 AM


Severn, Pepper, I think this fits us well...

DMB, thank you for coming in, and welcome to Passions...

Marge, you're cracking me up!

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6 posted 1999-11-23 09:35 AM


Sever....wonderfully written
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Thanks, Hoot.
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8 posted 1999-11-23 12:18 PM


Just a wink...Wars have started over less. Beautifully written.

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9 posted 1999-11-23 12:26 PM


Thank you, RE. You are quite right. {~,^}
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10 posted 1999-11-23 01:16 PM


really really like this sunshine, beautiful read
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11 posted 1999-11-23 01:42 PM


Thank you, ILI...it likes me, too!
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12 posted 1999-11-23 02:26 PM


This is great, Sunshine... Well done!
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13 posted 1999-11-23 02:34 PM


Suthern, as I face south, I curtsy. Thank you.
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[This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 11-23-1999).]

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15 posted 1999-11-23 07:09 PM


Great poem. Liked this one, Sunshine!
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16 posted 1999-11-23 07:49 PM


When she looked at me. . .she saw you with this poem

excellent

Sven

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17 posted 1999-11-23 11:40 PM


Sunshine this was really neat! Very well done! Some just have that gift, that you can feel when you walk into a room.
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18 posted 1999-11-23 11:44 PM


This is beautiful, Sunshine! Very well written!

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19 posted 1999-11-24 09:48 AM


Joy, Sven, Whtdove, Denise...I am overwhelmed at the responses this has received, as well as Marge's personal e-mail to me.

Thank you ALL so very much. Perhaps this one is a keeper.

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Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow


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20 posted 1999-11-24 10:00 AM


A definite keeper Sunshine!! Eye contact can be sooo much more than a simple exchange.
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21 posted 1999-11-24 10:15 AM


Sunshine - I read this again, as it is one of my favorites now that my daughter has decreed that she sees ME in it. What a wonderful compliment to this mom.
I hope you will be pleased to know that she has printed it out to share with the family.
I mean ... this is really a wonderful descriptive writing. Thank you sooooo much for sharing.

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22 posted 1999-11-25 09:34 AM


LostBoy, Marge,

these are the best compliments. My sun is shining. Thank you.

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23 posted 1999-11-30 11:33 PM


Sunshine it's been awhile since I've been around to read your poetry!! This is one of my favorites from you!! I could picture this, and it made me smile!! Very cool!!

Thanks...

Bridgette

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24 posted 1999-12-01 12:01 PM


pleasantly surprised! Beautiful and yes, surely a keeper. Nice work here, Sunshine.
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25 posted 1999-12-01 08:52 AM


Justbleu, Sally, I am still amazed at the positive response this little piece has continued to garner. Thank you so very much for your lovely comments. Indeed, this one will be a keeper!
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