Love's Opus #1 (first sonnet)

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Sally S.
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since 1999-06-07

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Ohio

0 posted 1999-11-13 08:05 PM

A whispered note, he gently plays his song.
A proud musician bound to take control
Of how this passion's flair stays staunch and strong
And how he claims my half makes him a whole.
Melodic song he plays, contented plea.
A ballad from his soul, he begs I trust
In all we feel inside, not what eyes see,
For love proclaimed, not merely harbored lust.
A forte cry, the beating heart ensues.
Concerto not the piece he has in mind.
Nocturne duet in sleepless night pursues
And strike the chords as souls become entwined.
Piano soft becoming love's prelude.
Two hearts conjoined, much more than interlude.

Kenneth Ray Taylor
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since 1999-11-11

Posts 139
Duluth, Minnesota, USA

1 posted 1999-11-13 09:34 PM

A beautiful poem. I've only written two sonnets myself. The first when I was 16 (which no one will ever see), and more recently when I was 44, which follows:

Sonnet on the Station of the Mother

The wisdom of the woman far exceeds
the wisdom of her husband. Proof of this
is proclaimed aloud by nature in the gifts
and offices that God has assigned to each.
Preeminence to the man is given first.
And some perhaps can't see beyond this point--
that it's only over trifles he enjoys
some measure of authority, but cursed
with mortal limitation, he dies.
What then becomes of all his splendid plans?
Does aught remain of anything he's done?
But He in whom alone pure wisdom lies,
as a treasure far too precious for the man,
entrusts the child to the care of the wiser one.

[I like yours better than mine.]

Denise

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2 posted 1999-11-13 09:44 PM

Absoutely beautiful! Truly a song of love.
And in answer to your question in the workshop, see your post of this in the workshop!

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Denise

JohnDoe82
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since 1999-08-04

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MO, USA

3 posted 1999-11-13 11:35 PM

Brilliant. Beautifull. What more can I say. Love it.

Balladeer

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4 posted 1999-11-14 12:42 PM

Music to my ears...and eyes. Very, very well done, Sally.

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

5 posted 1999-11-14 01:06 AM

Saqlly,
This gets a thumbs up from me, well done.

Poet deVine

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Hurricane Alley

6 posted 1999-11-14 10:00 AM

Simply lovely. A great sonnet!

hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05

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Glen Hope, PA USA

7 posted 1999-11-14 11:28 AM

Just don't let it be your last as the style suits you. Very well done, a symphony of words, well played out

Pepper
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since 1999-08-19

Posts 3079
Southern Florida

8 posted 1999-11-14 11:38 AM

Stunning Sally......

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A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!

Sally S.
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since 1999-06-07

Posts 847
Ohio

9 posted 1999-11-15 09:40 AM

Thank you all so much. I like this one much more now.

Thank you, thank you.

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