Open Poetry #4 |
Falling |
hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Evening shadows begin to fall, and the sky turns from blue to orange and red. Colors reflect off the water, mirroring the sky, as the sun sets on the ocean itself. Amidst all that beauty, I fail to notice anything but the spark in your eyes. You pull me closer to the edge of the cliff so that I may see nature at her finest and in doing so, you reach for my hand. “Don’t worry,” you smile and say, “I won’t let you fall.” Cant you see? ...I’m already falling. "I am nothing special, of this I am sure. I am a common man with common thoughts and I've led a common life. There are no monuments dedicated to me and my name will soon be forgotten, but I've loved another with all my heart and soul, and to me , this has always been enough." ~Nicholas Sparks from The Notebook [This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 12-23-1999).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Hoot, Very well put, good writing good poem, I like *L* Sy |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Hootessa This is terrific. I like the way you opened this poem by setting the scene, then introduced the situation so cleanly over the top of it, and finally linked in the double meaning of falling. (I also like the way you show all that skin in your picture... oops). |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Greetings Lady Hoot. A fine picture you paint with real colors and depth. Dare I say, one could almost fall into it. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Hoot what a way to express your feelings. Very well done! ROFL @ LJ, I had a mouth full of coffee at the moment and almost spit it out from laughing! |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Dovey Merry Christmas, little one. May the peace and love of Jesus be with you every moment of your life, especially in this time of celebration. |
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Coegwyr Junior Member
since 1999-12-20
Posts 35 |
Another well written piece Hoot that fits perfectly alongside all the others of yours that I’ve read. Thanks for sharing. |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
Ruth, What you paint upon my heart...I share here today with all who might look How you become more lovely each day I will never know. But this I do know. Should you fall.......Don't be surprised when I fall too.....or more so....that you find me there having fell before you and it is I who breaks your fall because no greater honor could I have than to catch this falling star that you are to me Golden Dreams to you Ruth....I am but a thought away......and a feeling shared Share what you are for you are what you share |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Ruth, I too loved this, you set a perfect scene and the ending was fantastic. What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Another great poem Ruth. I hope the hands that catch you bring peace and love. : ) Merry Christmas Ruth. : ) Hugs. Munda |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
Oh so beautiful Hoot! You definitely used all the right colors for this! I do believe this is one of my favorites of yours! It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Beautiful words and dreams my friend.. Merry Christmas Reach inside your heart, that is the greatest gift you can bestow. Merry Christmas.. ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Beautiful and well done...but of course! Denise |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Well, Ms. Hoot - I wondered where my Muse was ... NOW I KNOW ... told you, didn't I ! This is beautiful ... it's YOU. Love ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Thank you everyone, so so much Marge...sorry, I don't have your muse, seem to have found my own Long John...thank you , and yes, the word falling does indeed have a double meaning. Glad you liked the picture. David...Thank you, your words brought a smile to my face |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Beautiful hoot, great painting and the last lines really got to me. Happy Holidays! |
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samsonheart Member
since 1999-12-20
Posts 72Missouri rez. |
Wonderful poem hoot, I loved every word. samsonheart |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
what an ending wow |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Really MUCH enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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