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Is this the end?
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Is this the end? |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
I'm lying in critical condition in this hopital bed, with three bullets in my head. The pain is searing through my brain, causing me to cry out to the Lord in vain. I told the Lord that if he plans to take me, then let me leave quietly. I never thought that I would be on the recieving end, of a bullet from my best friend. We let money and women come in between us. Therefore, there wasn't much trust between us. Obviously, my friend needs to see a psychiatrist. I never thought that he was like this. He was a angel in disguise, that unvieled his true identity right before my own eyes. This is the result of all those years he smoked crack. I know he wishes that he could have those years back. All that crack, flipped his brain like an acrobat and now he's trapped like Daniel was in the lion's den. Because of him, my life is descending and is close to an ending. I belive that my life is coming to an end and my afterlife is fixing to begin. Before I go, I would like to thank everybody who was positive and all the ones that cared and loved me. I hope you all stay strong, reach mountain peaks, and hold on. At my last breath, I closed my eyes and told the world my final goodbye. Nathan |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Nate Dogg, I would take this poem with you as an introduction into the hall of past poets. It's a sure passport and you can't miss. Lots of luck, enjoyed the poem. |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
wow what a story.....sad too...... |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Thank you Seymour and lloveit! I appreciate every comment that is sent my way. Nathan |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
A very sad tale...I am looking forward to more, you speak from life experiences that few of us here have had to deal with. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Very imaginative! I liked it! Liz |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
Chilling and sad...but you pen powerful stuff. Keep it up  It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain |
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Femme's Father Member
since 1999-10-30
Posts 58Carrollton, TX, USA |
You had me going thinking this story was true til I got to the end and noticed it would have been the end of you. Very imaginative story. A man's heart often cannot see the light - because of the darkness of it's own motives.... - James David |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
It's so sad that this situation is all too common anymore. God help us. You have captured the pain from a very unique point of view...they dying victim. This is very good Nate. Denise |
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