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Michael
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0 posted 1999-12-17 01:55 PM


SEA SHELL

I wasn't always alone.
Once, hands held me,
soft fingertips brushing along
the callousness of my being.
Lips showering me with
compliments of beauty.
Eyes shimmering in distant view.
But always, they shimmered.

I was lifted up,
allowed to whisper in your ear.
Oh, how you used to love my voice.
I still remember the smile,
first time I spoke to you.
"Magic"?
Perhaps it seemed so, then.

How else could an insentient entity,
such as I,
sing with such fervent passion,
such longing, such zeal?
Were you merely mystified
by the soft calling
beneath a rough surface?
The peace and tranquility
I presented to you.
Has my gift been lost to you?
Why, now, do you look away?

Daily,
I sit here alone,
waiting, watching, wondering,
sifting through the channels of
suspended animation,
avid collector of dust.
Waiting to be touched once more.
Watching as the sheen of
forgotten magic
creeps over everdulling eyes.
Wondering,
why was I brought here,
to a world not of my own,
if only to sit here,
cast aside,
discounted?
A relic,
forgotten on the shelf.

< !signature-->

 Michael Anderson

It's the little things you take for granted,
That'll mean the most to you when they're gone.








[This message has been edited by Michael (edited 12-17-1999).]

© Copyright 1999 Michael Anderson - All Rights Reserved
Denise
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1 posted 1999-12-17 02:01 PM


Heartfelt and touching, Michael. Wonderful piece. I can feel the longing and pain. There is a purpose for everything, even though we may not always know what it is...why am I telling you this...you know that! Again, great poem!  

 Denise



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2 posted 1999-12-17 02:26 PM


APPLAUDS!!!! Michael, this is truly free verse in it's finest. The movement is great and I love the feelings you envoke here. Well done  
Michael
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3 posted 1999-12-17 05:34 PM


Thanks, Denise, always nice to hear, anyway.

Thanks, Ruth - I don't write much "free verse" so I take that as a huge compliment.


Michael

Elizabeth Santos
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4 posted 1999-12-17 05:37 PM


Very well done, you are expanding your talents, and giving us pleasure at the same time.
Liz

Isis
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5 posted 1999-12-17 05:52 PM


Michael my friend, if you glance on the shelf next to you, there is another sea shell feeling just the same as you do.  And besides sea shells are a piece of exquisite beauty.  

 What the inner voice says will NOT disappoint the hoping soul.
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)


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6 posted 1999-12-17 05:52 PM


Michael, for some reason, this piece has gotten to me more that any of yours I've seen. It is SO very true that, for some, the only pleasure is in the acquisition and, afterwards, the acquired becomes an 'avid collector of dust', as you so well put it. It is one of the most unfair things one can do to another. This poem, spoken from the side of the 'collected' is an excellent portrayal of feelings from that side. Well done.
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7 posted 1999-12-17 06:34 PM


As a poet obssessed with freeverse   I have to say this is an exquisite piece, Michael.

I love the imagery of dust and that phrase: 'everdulling eyes' is one that I wish I could own...

You got me with this one.  K

DreamEvil
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8 posted 1999-12-17 06:57 PM


Again my friend, you have described my feelings exactly.

Well done.

 Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©
-------------------------------------------------------
"Either kill me or take me as I am,
because I'll be damned if I ever change..."

Count Donatien Alphonse Francois de Sade
(Marquis de Sade)


Seymour Tabin
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9 posted 1999-12-17 07:06 PM


Michael,
You moved me to another time
And although it didn't rhyme
This time I fell in love
And agree with all the above.
Nice work. excellent poem.

Nan
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10 posted 1999-12-17 07:28 PM


I know that shelf.... It needs to be filled, eh??? Nice work, Michael....
Michael
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11 posted 1999-12-17 11:45 PM


Isis, I think I've found that other shell...in fact maybe even a second part of the same shell.

Balladeer, TY, the was much behind this poem and many ways to interpret it, I'm sure.  You're right on the money though.

Severn, again, that's quite a compliment...as I don't do free verse very often.  I am humbled.


Everyone else, Sincere thanks to all of you for the compliments.  

Michael

WhtDove
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12 posted 1999-12-17 11:56 PM


Michael this has much feeling in it. Though you are no longer in the dust and forgotten.
Excellent my friend!

Sally S.
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13 posted 1999-12-18 12:14 PM


Wow...stunning imagery, Michael!  You've an endless talent.  Stunning.  
poetFemmeFatale
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14 posted 1999-12-18 02:08 AM


Michael, the way you spoke of this piece today - I wasn't expecting anything nearly this exquisite!  I'm not just saying that because I'm fond of you either!  You sir, should give yourself more credit in the free verse department!  This was breathtaking - and I do believe - one of the best I've read from you yet!  Fabulous use of words, and imagery, descriptive to the point, I could FEEL it !  Aaaaahhh - makes me want to go to the shore.....And you thought it wasn't gonna go over well.....Looks like a hit to me!  ****curtsies mi-Lord
Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration
15 posted 1999-12-18 04:05 AM


Is there anything you can touch my friend, that doesn't turn to gold?
passing shadows
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16 posted 2004-06-02 03:13 AM



Tequilia_Sunrise
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17 posted 2004-07-04 11:36 PM


touching
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