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andy Junior Member
since 1999-12-16
Posts 17 |
This is by my 11 year old brother and Severn's surrogate brother, but he wrote it when he was six. It has been stuck on the kitchen wall since then, and I FINALLY convinced him to post it! >Seaangel  ~*~*~ Autumn leaves flipping down, twirling, swirling, round and round. Autumn leaves deciduous and evergreen, golden brown and red and yellow. Autumn leaves covering the town, covering the whole city. Autumn leaves making patterns, on the other trees. Autumn leaves, tickle and crunch under my feet. Autumn leaves rustling, gently on the ground. Autumn leaves nestling together, with a slight cuddly cuddle. Autumn leaves fluttering to the crackling, crunchy, prickly ground. Autumn leaves flipping down, twirling, swirling, round and round. By andy |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
big 's here oman he was only 6 and now he has doubled his age almost yuh wow i love it envious of the kid my first poem was entitled walt's rap (p u!!!!) this was wonderful! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
What a beautiful poem! But somebody's pulling my leg about the age of the poet! Don't think I could have done better. I liked all the sounds of the poem. Made me feel like I was walking through the leaves. I certainly hope we hear more from this young poet. Good work, Andy! |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
WOW ! Andy, this poem is DANDY ! You keep it up young man. This is just a great piece of work. Autumn leaves are such a favorite of mine. Have a wonderful MERRY CHRISTMAS. You are just too cool ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
This is a Wonderful poem Andy!! And to think you wrote this when you were six......WOW!! You're a natural...lots of talent here....  Welcome to Passions and I hope you will be sharing more of your work with us!! A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
What a great poem. I love it! I could hear it and see it. You have a great talent with words, Andy. Keep writing, okay. It is a wonderful and fun thing to do. Have a great Christmas summertime. In the dew of little things, the heart finds its morning and is refreshed. (ee cummings) |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Andy this is a wonderful poem...but please do tell me someone helped you with this one. I do not know of any 6 year olds that know what the word "deciduous" means. Heck I must have been 16 when I learned that one. Which just happens to have been two short years ago. (okay guys, he doesn't know any better, he's new here ) Welcome to passions |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Welcome to Passions, Andy! This is a great poem! I can't believe you wrote this when you were only six! Are you like a genius or something?!  Very very nice! Please post your other poems here too, as I am sure you must have quite a few! Denise |
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andy Junior Member
since 1999-12-16
Posts 17 |
Thanks everyone heaps  I learned DECIDUOUS in a spelling test for that topic so I can say my teacher helped, not to mention Severn for spell-checking it, and Seaangel for helping me put it on. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Andy - You'd better write more.... You have a knack for poetry.. You used some pretty good imagery here.... Nice Job..!!! |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Andy... well done. by the way.. what the heck does deciduous mean? |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
GREAT JOB kiddo! Look forward to seeing more of your talent. Keep it up.  ) |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Andy: This is one heck of a bright 6 year old, (did older brother help..*g*) likes to be observant too...Great poem and great subject.. HUGS Yesterday is but today's memory and tomorrow is today's dream... |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Andy - I told you I was right about the spelling!!!! Hehehehe. Of course you know I think you're a great poet so keep writing, little surro brother... |
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