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Sweet Memories |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio 
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Sweet memories are not to hide, The brightness of their colors shown When love captures your heart inside. Embrace the risk, our faith relied. Exploring was to be our own. Sweet memories are not to hide. Mere thoughts of this? It must be cried High from above and sung intone When love captures your heart inside! As love's first kiss for two betide, Soft fingertips throuh hair of rone. Sweet memories are not to hide. Contentment was to be our guide. Trusting souls not to be alone When love captures your heart inside. Combining futures thus implied As faith and trust through time had grown. Sweet memories are not to hide When love captures your heart inside. [This message has been edited by Sally S. (edited 12-17-1999).] |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Sally, this is wonderful! Very nice! Denise |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
.....Ain' lettin' no self-respectin' Villanelle slip to the next page.....NOT!!   With passion born of words alone, A kindled bond's aforesaid rare. When love from inside out has grown, Erotic nuance ne'er outshone. Clandestine musings freely share, With passion born of words alone. Allure endued as pheromone, In spirit lustful hearts declare When love from inside out has grown. With bated breath a bond has sown Intrinsic trust beyond compare With passion born of words alone. True intimacy's surely known. No greater love ~ No small affair When love from inside out has grown. An ecstasy as yet unknown Enjoins a once unseemly pair With passion born of words alone, When love from inside out has grown. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sally - I like this. It just flows nicely. ~*Marge*~ *Nan - Yours too. ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
Denise and Marge, Thank you both, you're always very nice with your replies. Nan, Thank you for trying to rescue this! Your villanelle is beautiful, BTW. Then again, I don't think I've ever seen a poem of yours that wasn't! Happy Holidays!  |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
How the heck did this beautiful piece slip back to page 4??? Excellent, Sally. Not only is the structure exemplary, the poem says an awful lot. SWEET MEMORIES would be a good title for me. Very nice, as your work always is. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Wow, exquisite piece, Sally. Simply beautiful. TY Balladeer, for the rescue. Can't believe I missed this one. Michael |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
Thank you so much Balladeer and Michael. Coming from the both of you, it's quite a compliment! (I took your advice, deer) |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
This is a very warm and tender poem coming from a warm and tender heart. Just lovely, and interesting verse Liz |
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Elizabeth
Moderator
Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Sally, I agree with you wholeheartedly-memories shouldn't be hidden! It's a wonderful poem too. Nail to the mast her holy flag, Set every threadbare sail- And give her to the god of storms, The lightning and the gale! -Oliver Wendell Holmes |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I've written one of these and they are not easy to pull off, especially not pulling one off as well as you did. Great Job!! |
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Sonny Junior Member
since 1999-12-18
Posts 29Schenectady, NY, USA |
I really enjoyed reading your poem! The writing of memories has been very hard for me. I focused primarily on specifics, when sometimes generalities would work better. Reading your poem made me come to that realization. Thank you for your beautiful poem and your teaching. |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
...shamelessly sending Sally's splendiferous villanelle up for another lap..... |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
I'm glad you did Nan....Sally, this is a Wonderful piece!! A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! Shannon |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Wow! That was a powerful poem. Keep it up! Nathan |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
Truly Awesome  Share what you are for you are what you share |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
Sally sells seashells by the seashore Sally Bo Bally Banana Fana Fo Fally The seashore sells Sally by the banana The soggy banana from the seashore was eaten by Sally is that a vilanelle?!? i never could write anythin fancy like yur good poem Sally Sweet! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Sally this is really beautiful, I don't know how I missed this, back to the top you go. What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
I'm sorry I couldn't respond to your replies sooner. I was rather ill the last few days and I missed you all..sniffle..so much!!...sniffle. I'm ok. I'm ok.  Elizabth and Liz..(giggles) Thank you both for your kind words. Ruth, Thank you, quite a compliment from a woman as talented as you. Sonny, I'm touched that this poem actually had that effect on you. You've given me a wonderful gift. Thank you. Nan, is splendiferous a word? LOL Thank you for the rescue! Pepper, you are a dear. My thanks to you. Nate, Sir_Knight and Dark, I'm glad you enjoyed this piece. Happy Holidays!! and...Walt?! LMAO!! um, sweetie? Did you miss your medication when you read this? Thank you so much for the laugh! You are a darling. |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
You have a very nice rythm and timbre Sally! < !signature--> How much more grievous are the consequences of anger than the causes of it. -Marcus Aurelius [This message has been edited by Local Rebel (edited 12-22-1999).] |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
hmmmmm Susan, eh? *giggle* I can live with that, hawke. Though, you can call me Sally too! Thank you. |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
ROFL@susan.... oops my fruedian slip is showing..... sorry Mustang Sally.... |
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Fairy Colours Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 169Sunrise,Fl,US |
This was a treat to read. --A Little Fairy-- |
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Travis Junior Member
since 1999-06-14
Posts 17 |
I would have to spend forever writing something like this. Very nice. =) Travis |
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