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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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What do you think? Haunted in a daunting way, But holding major sway. A hair thin line of strain, That is driving me insane. It coverts me in ecstasy, But causes much indignity. It is a scourge and a love, Carried by a dove. It drives me into sweat and cold, It makes me weak it makes me bold. I am but human, what can I do? When the subject matter speaks of you. I fence with my ID and parry, Exhaust myself and tarry. The battle is episodic And making me quite neurotic. My spider web is permanently set It's up to the fly to hit the net. |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
I like it Seymour..... I think of Silk strands of love when I read it.  Share what you are for you are what you share |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
If I am reading this right, then I hope it flies into that net! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Sy, This poem sounds like a boxing match Between yourself and you And that can be exhausting So here's what you should do Just calm down, take a breath A cold shower is very nice Grab a beer,settle down Lean your head on a pack of ice Turn on some music or watch TV Feet in hot tub is very warming If the symptoms still persist Take 2 aspirin and then call me in the morning Take care, Liz [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 12-14-1999).] |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Seymour: I love it as much as I hate that damned monkey...ooops....well it is late, or should I say early..  ))HUGS Yesterday is but today's memory and tomorrow is today's dream... |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I think you write wonderful poetry! That's what I think!  Denise |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
And I agree with Denise, you write very beautiful poetry. You are the best. (I was only kidding about the aspirin) Keep writing! Love ya, Liz |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I LOVE that final couplet, Sy.... cute - very cute... |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Yep! I like it too... |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
liked this a lot too great work |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Interesting...very contradictory - I like. Perhaps, to echo the contradictions, it is the spider who will be caught!!! Well written, Sy. K |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
First_Knight, Nice comp, thank you much. WhtDove, Your reading right. *L* Liz, We seem to compliment each other when we touch in fantasy. *L* RG, You are a dear or so it would appear *L* Denise, Sweet denise, you are to me a jelly bean And I love jelly beans. Nan, You always catch the best of the best. *L* Toe, So glad to hear from you, I thought you would like it. IIloveit, Thanks for the great, you made my day. Severn, LOL as I said before you are very astute. *L* |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Wonderful one Sey |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
I think this in one fine poem. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Hoot, Thank you, you are a dear. Mike, I thank you two. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I think I like it a lot... Sunshine Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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