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Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration

0 posted 1999-12-14 02:41 AM


Balance



So pale are my dreams, an illusion of light.
P erforming charades and answering with fright.
E mbalming my hopes in beakers of stone,
A djourning my mind to perils unknown.
K arma still unfound, where is thy threefold?
T here is no balance with empty arms cold.
O vertures of promises ever vain.
M idnight rises o'er soul slickened with pain.
E vening tide washes ashore, nightmares fade.
O ceans of sleep dance in silent parade.
F orgotten are hurts, forgotten are lies.
B orn are fantasies where broken hearts fly.
A ided by angels, love plays ‘neath the sun.
L iving reality, life can't become.
A voiding the truth which sleeping belies.
N ight comes to a close, dawn breaks in my eyes.
C ome winter morn, give release from the past.
E ase this deep scar, give me balance at last.



[This message has been edited by Christopher (edited 12-14-1999).]

© Copyright 1999 C.G. Ward - All Rights Reserved
Elizabeth Santos
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1 posted 1999-12-14 03:14 AM


Christopher,
So glad I was up at 3:00 A.M to find this!
Wonderful poem!
Liz

DreamEvil
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2 posted 1999-12-14 03:44 AM


Bored were we my friend?

These philosophical moments of yours are enlightening indeed.

 Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©
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"Either kill me or take me as I am,
because I'll be damned if I ever change..."

Count Donatien Alphonse Francois de Sade
(Marquis de Sade)


Rod
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3 posted 1999-12-14 04:50 AM


This is REALLY good! I enjoyed it very much.
You have enormous talent, my friend!
Well done!
Rod

Poet deVine
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4 posted 1999-12-14 06:26 AM


You never cease to amaze me! Excellent poem sir!  

Dark Angel
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5 posted 1999-12-14 06:30 AM


Christopher, this is terrific. I love Acrostics!  

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge



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6 posted 1999-12-14 07:14 AM


Good
One
Obviously
Done

Perfectly
Outstanding
Emitting
Much

~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com


Nan
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7 posted 1999-12-14 07:23 AM


Christopher - This is a great piece of work.... I enjoyed it immensely...

Do ya think that Marge dreams in rhyme???  

hoot_owl_rn
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8 posted 1999-12-14 08:56 AM


Wonderful words
Offerings of your heart
Done up in rhyme
Emitting a spark
Read here at Passions
Filling my mind
Undying wisdom
Lasting through time


[This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 12-14-1999).]

Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration
9 posted 1999-12-14 03:47 PM


S'been a while since I've had more than a few moments to respond to the amazing relpies you people bestow on me, so I'm gonna take a few seconds, (how does one really do that?) and say thanks!

msslinky- That is a marvellous compliment... I would say my talent lies in the art of BS'ing!   (ask anyone who knows me!)

Liz- You should be in bed! But thanks for taking the time to make me blush!  

Scott- as always bud, on the $$  
(Skyfyre asked me when I was going to write something, so while I was talking to her I penned this little ditty! Sort of a roundabout challenge!)

Rod- Thanks that's really another high compliment!

Devine- And I hope to never cease!

DA- Thank you, I love 'em too! They're so much fun to do and to read!

Marge- Good job yourself there!

Nan- Thanks...umm no spelling errers?  

Ruth- Aww, did you have to show me up??? LOL, good one friend!

Seymour Tabin
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10 posted 1999-12-14 03:54 PM


Chris,
Enjoyed the read, nice work.

caroline
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11 posted 1999-12-14 04:15 PM


Wow Chris...another great one. A "little ditty", huh? Your "ditties" make my stuff look like so much fluff!  



 It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain



Severn
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12 posted 1999-12-14 04:17 PM


Chris - a poem akin to awakely sleeping I see.
And it seems you do not wish to wake. Or is that you are awake -and cannot find the sleep?

Excellent writing, O God of Acrostics (don't let that go to your head...!)  

  K

[This message has been edited by Severn (edited 12-14-1999).]

Michael
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13 posted 1999-12-14 05:04 PM


Wow, great piece, Christopher.  Man, you really inspire me when you go off like this acrostically.  I may just have to respond with one of my own...Fair Warning

Michael

Marilyn
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14 posted 1999-12-14 05:47 PM


Chris...what can I say? This was very well done and very deep. Thankyou for showing me the way to this piece. I wish I could pen such pieces in such short time. You  are extremely talented my friend.  
RainbowGirl
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15 posted 1999-12-14 06:05 PM


Chris: Rich with feeling, as always..

Husg sweetheart

 Yesterday is but today's memory and tomorrow is today's dream...



WhtDove
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16 posted 1999-12-14 10:37 PM


Wonderful acrostic Chris! I hope it all balances out for ya soon!  ~HUGS~
poetFemmeFatale
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17 posted 1999-12-14 11:03 PM


Talk about philosophical indeed !  Whew....let me say just a simple "I'm very impressed"....Your head is big enough without me adding to it!  Loved the little "color" thingy you did, BTW!     Really made it look snazzy.....
Denise
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18 posted 1999-12-14 11:42 PM


A wonderful acrostic and a wonderful poem, too! WOW!  

 Denise



Nicole
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19 posted 1999-12-15 12:13 PM


What can I say, that has not already been said?

I felt this one...excellent work, as always.

 May I never be too busy to help another's load,
Then I'll be drinking from the saucer 'cause my cup has overflowed.

--Author Unknown

Skyfyre
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20 posted 1999-12-15 02:48 PM


Challenge, however implied, well met, my friend.

An impressive piece of work -- and to think you held a conversation with me while it was written.  I feel honored and maybe a little bit awed (but don't let it go to your head, got it??)  

--Kess



 You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end.



Dolphins3
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21 posted 1999-12-15 03:29 PM


Christopher, Great job! I really enjoyed it.
Dr.Moose1
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22 posted 1999-12-15 04:55 PM


We could use a little of that "balance " at the "stute" ( where it seems most of us aren't).Great piece , and do stop in some time.
Doc.

Sally S.
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23 posted 1999-12-15 07:35 PM


~~~~sneaks up....very, v e r y  quietly~~~~ shhhhhhh!!  The last time I replied to Christopher, he challenged me!!!  So just tell him for me that I think this is wonderful...well written and I think he has enormous talent for the acrostics!  shhhhhhhh!!!~~~~~tip toes away ~~~~
Trips over deVine's stack of poetry, slides into Balladeer's musical equipment. BANG!! AHHHHH!!  
Um...nice work there, Chris.  
ouch~~~limps away~~~  

Oscar Wilde
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24 posted 2000-04-01 12:29 PM


Balance? I seem to have lost mine. You are so talented!


Your biggest fan,

O.

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