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The Lily |
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Rod Member
since 1999-12-08
Posts 149Auckland New Zealand |
THE LILY Oh, elegant flower, how noble you tower! Your poise and your grace you display; To catch by and by the beholder’s eye Reflecting the new light of day. Your bloom tells the story of nature’s full glory The hand that designed you could only be Truth; For only the power that conceived the first hour Could so gift you with eternal youth. There is none can compare with your beauty so rare With your ballgown so verdant and fine; Your complexion of white puts all darkness to flight; Your creation a matter divine. Your symmetry sings and your petals are wings Lifting your gaze to the skies; Caressed by the breeze, you acknowledge the trees As they whisper enchanted replies. Whilst the dewdrops adorn your perfection of form And you bask in your spotlight of gold; I reflect on the pleasure you give beyond measure To those with the time to behold. As I ponder the mystery of your ancestral history I stand humbled by feelings sublime; You have changed not in time, since the Genesis line Was first drawn on the vast sands of time. Your magic is told in great stories of old In manifold mention you feature; But you reached highest glory in scriptural story Crowned queen above all by the Teacher. “ For I say unto you that even Solomon in all his glory is not arrayed like one of these” Luke 12 v27. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Lovely words - the lily is lovely, in all of its varieties.  K |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Well now...What have we here? A wonderful subject matter, of course.... woven around some pretty precise technical work..... I see some pretty flawless alternating anapestic trimeter and tetrameter ... You've adeptly included internal rhyme in your longer lines.... You've salted the entire work nicely with metaphors and personification...... um.... that's just my first read.... Going back for more now.... .... I'm happy...  .... |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Rod - This is just magnificient. A true array of verse that captivated me. I found it enchanting. I found this line so perfect : 'For only the power that conceived the first hour Could so gift you with eternal youth.' BEAUTIFUL ... JUST BEAUTIFUL ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas |
Wow! I'm humbled by the talent i see here....superb! "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me." -Charles Brugnot |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Exceptional poem, Rod. Your work has a beauty of form and emotion that's a treat to read! So glad you joined us!  |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Truly a work of art BRAVO!!! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Rod--what a wonderful treat to read this. You have enchanted me |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Taking the time and effort to make a poem technically excellent and still enjoyable to read is worthy of admiration...and I admire this piece very much. To the world you might be just one person but to one person you might just be the world. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Let's go another lap around......  |
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Moonlight Member
since 1999-06-25
Posts 105Auburn, Alabama USA |
I really liked this! Especially the use of the word "ballgown". Very nice poem, Rod! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Lovely, lovely, lovely! Denise |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
Could your Lily be a lady? For I have know of such. I enjoyed this far to much and find myself returning to reread......Excellent! Share what you are for you are what you share |
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Femme's Father Member
since 1999-10-30
Posts 58Carrollton, TX, USA |
Your poem was beautifully done and based on the Word of God. No fault could be found by anyone because of your talent and perfection in style. I love the way you hid the Word so slyly within your text. You must be wise as a serpent and harmless as a dove. God Bless You. A man's heart often cannot see the light - because of the darkness of it's own motives.... - James David |
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Rod Member
since 1999-12-08
Posts 149Auckland New Zealand |
Thank you all SO much for your kindness. It is I who am both humbled and privileged to be counted among your number! If I may use the parlance of one of your esteemed number - This website "likes me much"!! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Enchanting Indeed!! Beautiful Rod! What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Wish you would come back, Sir! |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Another lovely poem ARCTIC WIND |
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