We might be Giants (rewrite)

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RobertB
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since 1999-09-26

Posts 1104
Champaign, IL

0 posted 1999-12-11 07:10 PM

We might be giants

In the glow through soot
covered chimneys cheating
hours from the darkness
by tongue of flame lapping
up kerosene by the pint
a little man sits imagining
faces of the voices crackling
through vacuum tubes warmed
by current from the wind turned propeller
conceiving in his mind
Worlds of Giants penetrating
a room of burning shadows…
and cobwebs danced in the heat

*

In the glow through the dust on
an Acer 34T UVGA
hypnotized by the scroll of words that
grip the eyeballs choking-
sniffing in the seconds
and coughing hours by the lung-full
sits a little man tapping
on the keyboard like a pianist
composing his world to an audience
from another time zone
warmed by the embrace of HIS likeness….
and cobwebs dance at their feet.

Robert

if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming.

Saxoness

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since 1999-07-18

Posts 1102
Texas

1 posted 1999-12-11 07:20 PM

Wow! What beautiful flow!

"Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

-Charles Brugnot

RobertB
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since 1999-09-26

Posts 1104
Champaign, IL

2 posted 1999-12-11 07:33 PM

Thanks! I was afraid when I whittled at the first post. I wasn't sure what would happen!!! I just want to convey the feeling of what it was like 60 years ago when a person sat at a battery powered radio and listened to all the Giants of the world speaking.

Now with the internet we all can be giants and speak to the world. Yet....we can be a slave to all this....spending so much time that we wonder why we have so little of it.

RB

Nan

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since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

3 posted 1999-12-11 07:41 PM

Robert, I didn't get the full meaning until I read your description.... I like the analogy - Nice job.....

Denise

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since 1999-08-22

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4 posted 1999-12-11 08:10 PM

Very nice, Robert! Wonderful choice of words and images!

Denise

RobertB
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since 1999-09-26

Posts 1104
Champaign, IL

5 posted 1999-12-11 08:12 PM

thanks!!! no more rewrites on this one!

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

6 posted 1999-12-11 08:14 PM

I liked it before, and now, even though I didn't completely understand it. Now, with the explanation, I do.

RobertB
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since 1999-09-26

Posts 1104
Champaign, IL

7 posted 1999-12-11 09:13 PM

Thank you Martie....I have really thought about adding explanations to all poems I post!!!

RB

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