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Soul-less Black ( Trochaic / Color?) |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
As in stygian darkness dwells no light shadow has no meaning in this place, color fades afar into your night, emptiness has shown its inner space. Living, yet of life you seem devoid, peering at your surface none can tell, there behind obsidian employed masking deeper yet another shell. Madness surely lurks where you reside, gruesomely your spectre closely looms, cavernous your maw lay outstretched wide rank with the decay of death and doom. Here, before there is no turning back, gaze upon the face of soul-less black. |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Don't tell ME what fades into my nought! My nought is inviolate!  Other than that, your poem is perfection indeed.....well done, doc  er, cancel that. My hard-nosed teacher personality caused me to check out sepulchral. According to dictionary.com and Webter's (including audio verification) the accent is on the second syllable PUL, which makes the start iambic. Other than THAT, your poem is perfection indeed...well done, doc  |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Balladeer, You caught me , I also had to check the pronunciation and was about to do a re-write only to discover you were already one step ahead AGAIN! (Arrgh!) and, I really wanted to use that word too, oh well. Thanks for the critique, by my count that's four down and one to go. Doc [This message has been edited by Dr.Moose1 (05-13-2008 03:02 PM).] |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
YEAHHHH! finally the Doc has made a little error! I already started to think you could write "perfect" only. Great job Doc. |
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