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Bridget Shenachie
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since 2002-01-23
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Kansas USA

0 posted 2003-08-11 11:16 PM



Ruiz
Is far too eager to please,
Unwilling to do the mental striptease
And face the chill of a rejection deep-freeze.

Ruiz
Is unwilling to create unease.
In writing, he prefers to appease
And express those words that give the heart ease.

Ruiz
Hates to express what he foresees
And usually writes so the reader agrees.
Alas, his writing sounds like legalese.

Shenachie
11 August 2003


© Copyright 2003 Louise Ryan - All Rights Reserved
Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
1 posted 2003-08-13 09:09 AM


I would have been here last night
but I got slapped with that silly virus...

Enjoyed this Very much, Schenachie!

Munda
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since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544
The Hague, The Netherlands
2 posted 2003-08-13 06:12 PM


I'm sorry, I'm lost with this one Bridget. who is Ruiz? A famous American writer/poet? I have no idea! LOL However, I do know how hard it is to write a poem with only the same end rhyme and you did a great job.
Nan
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3 posted 2003-08-17 09:19 AM


... This poem wants me to break into song..."Lou-ise"...
Bridget Shenachie
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since 2002-01-23
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Kansas USA
4 posted 2003-08-26 04:42 PM


Sunshine--Thank you for reading and the kind response.

Munda--Ruiz is no one in particular.  It was simply a name that rhymed.  In this case, Ruiz is simply the personification of any writer that struggles with these writing difficulties.

Nan--Thanks for the fresh breeze of your kind comment.  

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