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Local Parasite

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since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

0 posted 2003-06-02 12:27 PM

Before our next assignment comes around for June, how about a warmup exercise?

A friend of mine with no taste in poetry asked me to write for her a quatrain about a donut. I did, and she didn't like it... "I didn't ask for elizabethan!" Hehe...

She maintains that it's easy to write a good four-line stanza about a donut. I'm not sure. It was kind of easy for me, I just used iambic pentameter and abab (I was just reading Paradise Lost on the bus, so I'm thinking in pentameter about now). Took me about five seconds. She didn't like it... hehe...

Here's mine:

quote:
O donut, with thy shapely curves, and round
Illustrious hole--why dost thou so fulfill
My dark desires, when consequence confounds
With fatfulness thy sweet, exotic thrill?

YOUR turn. I want to know if this is really easy or not. A quatrain about a DONUT. And, try to include some deep meaning to it if at all possible. No need to make whole threads for them, just respond in this one. I'm excited to see what others come up with. Maybe I'll even give her one that she likes.

Duncan
Member Ascendant

since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

1 posted 2003-06-02 01:30 AM

Krispy Kreme wafts through the night
Waking me from drunken slumber
I stumble then toward glazed delight
And wait for Lou to call my number

a_hollowman
Junior Member

since 2003-05-30

Posts 30
Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada

2 posted 2003-06-03 11:59 AM

Doughnut, you are so full and yet
I see in you a gaping hole
But I care for you and so do not fret
Your emptyness does make me whole

- a(less)hollowman

Dr.Moose1
Member Elite

since 1999-09-05

Posts 3448
Bewilderment , USA

3 posted 2003-06-03 08:24 PM

Round and wide your sweet divide
does favor me with suicide
for you're the dream I'd like to eat
all gooey, chewey, sticky sweet!

Nan

Administrator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

4 posted 2003-06-24 08:14 AM

There's nothing like a Dunkin Donut morn
An early Sunday trek to Munchkin land
So pay no heed to those who choose to scorn
A "Boston Creme" right now would be just grand...

Ringo

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since 2003-02-20

Posts 3684
Saluting with misty eyes

5 posted 2003-06-24 09:49 PM

I, blue suit, badge to match
Standing mornings on the watch
Knowing the day will be going good
I have indulged in that round doughhy food.

Maybe not what you were lookinf for, however, I couldn't resist.

Once in a dream, far beyond these castle walls...

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