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Sunset

majnu

Senior Member

since 2002-10-13

Posts 1088
SF Bay Area

0 posted 2003-01-30 11:35 AM

Sunset

Sweet sunset so often described,
Poet’s pallet empty and canvas covered
Yet majesty daily reigns down.

Sand in toes escaping cool water’s kiss,
Face the west, eyes towards flames quest,
SEE the sun, attention to one.

Sun spot flare, focus narrow there,
Stationary sentinel set, Voila, la lumiére arrêtte!
Laissez faire la terre tourné.

Heavenly traveler sweeps you away from the
Sun. Rush of blood acceleration back,
The sun does not set, the earth turns away…

Like the Poet from his eternal Flame.

-majnu
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Timid thoughts be not afraid. I am a Poet.

Nan

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

1 posted 2003-02-02 09:11 PM

This piece is great... I see some nice imagery here...

quote:

Poet’s pallet empty and canvas covered ...metaphor

Yet majesty daily reigns down. ...personification

Sand in toes escaping cool water’s kiss, ...metaphor

Face the west, eyes towards flames quest, ...metaphor

Stationary sentinel set, Voila, la lumiére arrêtte! ...metaphor Laissez faire la terre tourné. ...- (en francais - tres bien)

Heavenly traveler sweeps you away from the
Sun. metaphor/personification

The sun does not set, the earth turns away… ...metaphor

Like the Poet from his eternal Flame. simile

Very nicely penned, majnu...

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