Monsoon - formatted free verse imagery

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Monsoon - formatted free verse imagery

majnu

Senior Member

since 2002-10-13

Posts 1088
SF Bay Area

0 posted 2003-01-15 12:02 PM

Between Heaven and Hell lies Gaia beautiful.
Come dark thunderheads, dress your bride in jewels,
Blue lightning anklets, drench her in pearly rain;
She cries for you to release your waterworks.

Clothe her in roses puckering their lips,
Envelop her in robes of pregnant black
Clouds, Kiss her dusty face with liquid
Lips, Touch her with fingers of gentle wind.

Let the days turn, let the parched earth not burn.
Block out old Sol’s shaft of lights, shade her skin
And when Sol tires and gives way to Celine.

By goddesses soft glow, take her slow,
Higher then before to where your clouds grow,
Then rest again till you are next laden.

-majnu
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Timid thoughts be not afraid. I am a Poet.

Dr.Moose1
Member Elite

since 1999-09-05

Posts 3448
Bewilderment , USA

1 posted 2003-01-15 07:32 PM

majnu,
Whoa, turn on the air conditioner,it's getting hot in here! Nice write.
Doc

majnu

Senior Member

since 2002-10-13

Posts 1088
SF Bay Area

2 posted 2003-01-17 02:34 PM

moose,
the funny thing is that I had no idea of any ulterior meaning while writing it, but when I re-read it I couldn't say anything but a pleased "oops."

-majnu
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Timid thoughts be not afraid. I am a Poet.

jjote
Senior Member

since 2002-12-25

Posts 1088
Ontario, Canada

3 posted 2003-01-17 10:48 PM

It happens to me too sometimes. You take 2 or 3 words, let them flow from your fingers and thoughts, and you never know where they will take you. Sometimes it becomes a whole new world and discovery.

So when I am dejected or bored, time flies so fast when I decide to just tinker around with words. A poet that I'm not - I just read them for my own pleasure (or displeasure?)..hehe

Nan

Administrator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

4 posted 2003-01-26 10:12 AM

"Oops" is good - especially when it produces such wonderful imagery... metaphor and personification are oozing from every line. This is an excellent example of what we're looking for this month... Thanks, majnu...

Bridget Shenachie
Senior Member

since 2002-01-23

Posts 1056
Kansas USA

5 posted 2003-01-27 10:45 PM

Such a sophisticated and beautiful poem! I was astonished to read your comment that the layers of meanining were pure accident. You are a natural. I'll be looking for more of your writing!

Shenachie

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