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Nan

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

0 posted 2003-01-12 07:12 PM

Cloaked

I stand unclad in cold façade of stone,
My eyes downcast lest passers-by might see
A glimmering uncast that may have shown
What lies beneath the calloused flesh of me.

I stand alone within a clouded pane,
Ensconced by shades of calcified obscure.
Travails of time run through my tattered vein,
Imbrued in concrete wall of life’s endure

I stand enchambered by a furrowed sill,
Etched gravely now upon once florid brow,
With sash held taut unscathed from bitter chill…
A shell secure as winter’s leafless bough.

I stand in solitude midst bustling wrest,
Pulsation’s sound the faintest of discern.
As shades of lichened green across my breast,
Enshroud all semblances of worldly yearn.

I stand in crevices of self impose
In wraithlike specter’s resolute disguise.
Dare not those passers-by presume suppose
Of that which lies behind my languid eyes.

I stand defaced neath veils of sanctity,
Protective labyrinth of lattice shorn
From marrow’s soft invisibility.
Sole piece of olive wisp my true adorn

I stand unclad in cold façade of stone,
Yet passion’s breath still flickers silently.
One solitary kindling’s ember shone
From far beneath the calloused flesh of me.

Waft every crest upon your destined sea
Embrace the Wave of Serendipity
Lest its elusive arcane ecstasy
Refurl with sail for all eternity
Nancy Ness

Dr.Moose1
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since 1999-09-05

Posts 3448
Bewilderment , USA

1 posted 2003-01-15 07:26 PM

Nan,
This piece is a magnificent monument to the meaning of imagery!
A stunningly statuesque simulacrum encompassing the very essence of the word!
But, enough of my sychophantic solliloquies, suffice it to say I'm simply stunned by your loquacious "Ness".
Doc

jjote
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since 2002-12-25

Posts 1088
Ontario, Canada

2 posted 2003-01-16 09:35 AM

I agree with Doc - such magnificence should be ensconced(new word use for me) in monuments.
This is beyond poor me, I am in awe.

Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2003-01-19 09:14 PM

For some of us, the need to bring out the dictionary is always a positive requirement when reading your works...

which for me, is a plus.

You don't even want to ASK where I sometimes read the dictionary....

I applaud you...because I have read this several times, and with, or without, the photo, the imagery is there. But not without the reader being given time. Time to be immersed in the lexis that is so demanding, time to take in the breath of the poet who pens this timeless article of observation....

and I do not say this because you are the Teacher...I say this, because I wish I had the talent to take the TIME to write like you.

I bow, and applaud...

and sit in awe.

Bridget Shenachie
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since 2002-01-23

Posts 1056
Kansas USA

4 posted 2003-01-27 10:40 PM

Miss Nan!

Your poem brought a statue to life! Thank you for your lesson in imagery not to mention vocabulary! I do struggle with imagery due to my years of technical/business writing. I am so glad of this assignment, however challenging I find it.

Shenachie

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