Sands Of Evermore (Terza Rima)

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Sands Of Evermore (Terza Rima)

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

0 posted 2002-11-23 10:52 AM

Sands Of Evermore {Terza Rima}

Her hearts wish was to someday see the sea
behold, cherished dreams can not be denied.
There her soft soul would finally fly free.

Within special bonding, she did confide.
She wanted held in its magical spell,
to feel the surf rushing in with the tide.

He took her to where peacefulness does dwell
she, mesmerized in tranquilities view
dancing in starlight, among oceans swell.

Dreams realized in sunsets golden hue
walk of memories upon the shore
in friendships sharing, devotion of two.

In mystical moments where spirits soar,
held in reality, for evermore.
(cuz Karilea asked for another.......)

I know that you can 'read' me
but can you 'hear' "me"?

Paul Wilson

Member Elite

since 2002-07-07

Posts 4711
United States

1 posted 2002-11-23 09:23 PM

Donna~ Enjoyed very much. Your words paint such vivid pictures. You have a gift for writting such beautiful poems...Paul

Nan

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

2 posted 2002-12-01 09:47 AM

This is lovely, Donna - A tranquil seaside theme will get me every time. You've done a good job on your theme development and rhyme scheme. I see a couple of places where you were inconsistent on your iambic meter, and that's about all the constructive critique I could offer on this one... Nicely done...

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