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Sunshine
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Listening to every heart

0 posted 2002-11-19 12:33 PM



Hidden
[Terza Rima]

Somewhere, hidden deep in blackest archive
A treasured chest of words in blessed blend
Somewhere, hidden deep, where they, alive,

Comforting with truth, mayhap love, portend
Where I shall win my rest and nightly ease,
Neither nightmare nor concern shall contend

Whereby this heart be held lone in love’s seize
Where this mind be bent in blessed relief
Where worries art cast to far away breeze

I pray that the dark skies shall not be brief
But long bathe in your words among the sheets
Allowing salt soak of past tears base grief

Below, Crier sings as he walks the streets
Calling out that all is well, all is well
My weep a silent, lone, and somber beat

Somewhere, hidden deep, is my love’s sweet swell
Somewhere, hidden deep, peels my mourning bell

© Copyright 2002 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
Bridget Shenachie
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since 2002-01-23
Posts 1056
Kansas USA
1 posted 2002-11-19 11:14 AM


Hi Sunshine!

This is such a beautiful terza rima of love soothing sorrow written in perfect pentameter.  Your subject matter pours from your very soul.  Thank you for your lovely poem.  It reflects your beautiful spirit.

Shenachie

Munda
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since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544
The Hague, The Netherlands
2 posted 2002-11-20 06:20 PM


As usual you shine girl, but of course I didn't expect any less.
Titia Geertman
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since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182
Netherlands
3 posted 2002-11-20 08:36 PM



WOW some terza rima you wrote here!!

Like your pic, hello Sunshine

Titia

Like scattered leaves...my words will flow

Paul Wilson
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since 2002-07-07
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4 posted 2002-11-23 09:31 PM


Sunshine~ Enjoyed very much...Paul
Thanks for all the help.

[This message has been edited by Paul Wilson (11-24-2002 03:46 AM).]

Nan
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5 posted 2002-12-01 07:42 PM


Hidden deeply or not... The mourning bell yet tolls... This is very nicely done, Sunshine.  A theme well developed, as always..
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