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Marge Tindal
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0 posted 2002-08-08 09:23 PM



Free-Falling
~*Marge Tindal*~

I have fallen free
free to love you or not
not tethered to the past
past the element of change
change in degree of latitude
latitude matching attitude
attitude rises in altitude
altitude sets me free
free-falling into you
you set me free
free to love
love only
you



*Found some tiny thoughts playing in the sandbox*


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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[This message has been edited by Marge Tindal (08-08-2002 09:52 PM).]

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1 posted 2002-08-08 09:46 PM


Margie!!! Say it ain't so!!!! Hum me a sonnet...sing me a villanelle. How about a little couplet, sweetie!!!???
Mark Bohannan
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2 posted 2002-08-09 01:25 AM


All I know is that I have been staring at the words passed to the next line and I know there is a style name for it......I DON'T pretend to know what it is but I do know....it is amazing how effortlessly you make it seem.  Balladeer mentioned a villanelle...would that be it?  Hey....I am here to learn and I think I must have missed a whole bunch of classes that I need to make up. LOL  Beautifully done ..... when you fall free you fall in ballerina twirl.
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3 posted 2002-08-09 08:58 AM


Balladeer~
Thank you kind sir~
Just doing my homework !
(well ... when I'm not playing in the sandbox)
LOL @ 'couplet' ...

MarkB~
Shucks ... iffen it's got a form or style 'name' ...
I missed that class too~

All I can tell you ... is that it might be
that 'dancing kite' from the meadow thing I told you about ...

It took a couple of minutes to write and post ... other than that ... it was effortlessly cavorting about the meadow until I reeled it in~

Get the too the meadow my friend ...
I've saved you a spot !
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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4 posted 2002-08-09 02:47 PM


Pretty ingenious Marge. And don't let Deer pick on you either. BTW, is that called serpentine verse? And does anyone know what happened to Bob's Byway, Poetic Glossary? The page doesn't open any more.

Thanks,
Pete

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5 posted 2002-08-12 03:40 PM


Ya' know what, Pete ?
It COULD be that Serpentine thingy~
Good on you ... could be ...
but would that make it a 'structured' piece .. ?
With rules and stuff ?
OH NO !  It's supposed to be FREE !!

Well ... that's my poem ...
and I'm stuck to it~

Sandbox *giggles*
~*Marge*~

BYtheWAY ... I think Deer took Byway Bob's book !
Honest Injun !

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Titia Geertman
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6 posted 2002-08-12 08:13 PM



Oh dear, what a beauty you wrote.
I have to think up something for this class yet, still playing in the sandbox I am. LOL

Don't you mind Deer, he's just jealous.

Titia

Like scattered leaves...my words will flow

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7 posted 2002-08-13 02:19 PM


your poem free- falling
falling thoughts made to flow
flow freely- Oh! how easy u make it seem.


Marge Tindal
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8 posted 2002-08-13 02:28 PM


Titia~
Sifting .. sifting .. sifting~
Keep on poet, sifting~
You'll mold something beautiful before it's over~

Chitsank~
Welcome to Passions AND to the Workshop~
We have lots of fun here ...
Heck ... we even learn stuff~

It is 'easy' when you just find the right words laying around~
Honest Injun !
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

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9 posted 2002-08-13 03:37 PM


Hey Marge, I'm not sure you can say "honest Injun" anymore. That might be stereotyping a suppressed minority group or something

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10 posted 2002-08-13 03:57 PM


LOL~
Pete ... if YOU can say 'Not A Poet'
this little Cherokee can say ... Honest ~
LOL ... and

I am 'supressed'~
But not 'depressed'
Sometimes I 'digress'
But will not 'regress'
'unless' ....

~*ChucklingLittleCherokee*~


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11 posted 2002-08-13 05:13 PM


ROFL now.

Madame Chipmunk
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12 posted 2002-08-16 12:44 PM


I love the way you did this one Marge...
I honestly think its brilliant...
and free.....
~ free hugs from a chipmunk

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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13 posted 2002-08-26 08:54 AM


I LOVE this piece - It's formatted free verse.  Your presentations are always superb, Marge...

I've tried to find the name of this 'wrap-around' style, but my poetic encyclopedia is HUUUUGE - I'll keep lookiing - Erstwhile, here's the Britannica definition of Serpentine Verse
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serpentine verse
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in poetry, a line of verse beginning and ending with the same word, as in the first line of Alfred, Lord Tennyson's “Frater Ave Atque Vale”:

Row us out to Desenzano, to your Sirmione row


The term likens such verses to depictions of serpents with their tails in their mouths.





I love to learn more stuff too...

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14 posted 2002-08-26 12:14 PM


Pete~
Me sooooooo glad to *tickle* you~

Lyra~
Thank you sweetheart~
I'm just a happy little 'sifter'~

TEACH !
I am sooooooooooooo happy to see you~
Did my homework real early .... so got sand between my toes for the rest of the month~

AND ... thank you for the snakey 'splaination~

Now ... how's about we just call this 'format' Lattice ?
You know, like ...

Lattice intertwine you
Lattice us make you smile
We can do a few tweaks
Some old and then some new tweaks
We're very FREE VERSE-atile~

Can't wait until you get to Florida dear lady~
We got LOTS of sand here !
*Huggers*
~*Marge*~



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[This message has been edited by Marge Tindal (08-26-2002 12:18 PM).]

jbouder
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15 posted 2002-08-26 09:48 PM


Marge:

Nice offering.  I like the visual touch.  And I think the point about free-verse is that it can be as structured or random as it needs to be to make the point you want it to make.

Thanks for the read.

Jim

Bridget Shenachie
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16 posted 2002-08-28 04:39 AM


Marge--

I thought that this was a shape poem, shaped as a parachute.  Am I the only one who saw it that way?

Enjoyed!

Shenachie

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17 posted 2002-08-28 08:50 AM


JBouder~
Thank you~

Bridget~
Could be ... then again ...
it's free for the reader to interpret~

I didn't intend to 'shape' it ... it just fell that way~
Oops ... hmmmmmm, parachutes should float, shouldn't they ?
Look out below !
Tee-Hee-Hee~

Good morning classmates ...
the sandbox is now open~
*SandyHugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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