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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA 
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I think I'd like to write a poem or two To see how many changes I can do Taking care to not erase the flow Watching out for each foot as I go. As i write every line in a way So as not to erase my display. Can it work out? Who can say? Happily I will just play. I know that though the flow must go like glass I will instill my will to make it pass. Then, if I should succeed, it will fulfill a need And make me proud indeed that I could do it. Should someone say to me, "I love your poetry" I'll answer happily, "There's nothing to it!" But, as poets we all know That it ain't necessarily so. To be craftsmen we must use Every method that there is to choose. So work on every technique in the book You can do And you will unleash the poet inside That is you. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Very clever , entertaining, and educational. A wonderful lesson in meter (I see you noticed my bust) You don't miss a thing! Liz |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I never miss a pretty bust  [This message has been edited by Balladeer (06-19-2002 10:41 PM).] |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Well Balladeer, I am trying to work on all of the techniques. I don't think I am getting very far on them, though. Maybe someday, I will get it. [This message has been edited by SmartChick (06-19-2002 11:28 PM).] |
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Bridget Shenachie Senior Member
since 2002-01-23
Posts 1056Kansas USA |
Hey! I love your poetry! Shenachie |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Balladeer, "nothing to it" for you maybe. Thanks again for for the critiques. Doc |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Wise words and a great lesson. Thanks.  |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
??? "Should someone say to me, "I love your poetry" " ??? I love your poetry ... I love your poetry ... I love your poetry ... I love your poetry ... I love your poetry ... I love your poetry ... I love your poetry ... I love your poetry ... I love your poetry ... (I need some program code that shows the above as an endless repetative loop) Wonderful change-ups in form Michael .......... I "loved" this!  Best wishes and hugs, /Kit |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
 sitting here sigh reading sigh So that's how it's supposed to be done  Just  Deer.Titia Like scattered leaves...my words will flow |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Ok, it's clever but not one of your best. Seriously, I don't know how you could mix that much into such a short poem. It's sort of like a micro version of Kit's feet thing. Thanks, Pete |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
LOL! Wasn't supposed to be one of my best, Pete....just an exercize like playing scales on the piano instead of The Moonlight Sonata....thanks for stopping by.. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
ARGH.... still tripping over sylLAHbles and meter.... [shh, karilea...just stick to free verse, and no one will mind...] See? My muse knows! |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Well, of course I knew it was not intended to be your best. In fact not even close. Now don't get me wrong, I don't mean to belittle this one any either.  Still think you did a great job of mixing in a little of just about everything that could have been mixed.BTW, playing the sonata is a lot more fun that scales  Pete |
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