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Titia Geertman
Member Ascendant

since 2001-05-07

Posts 5182
Netherlands

0 posted 2002-03-14 08:24 PM

it's raining and I'm sitting here
it seems that I am stuck you see
no use today for my cutting gear
it's always raining when I am free

it seems that I am stuck you see
so I must do some other chores
it's always raining when I am free
okay, okay I'll scrub the floors

so I must do some other chores
hey, I know where I'd rather be
okay, okay I'll scrub the floors
let the housewife in me free

hey, I know where I'd rather be
so this is what I'm going to do
let the housewife in me free
and then I'll write a poem for you

so this is what I'm going to do
I'll scrub the floors untill they shine
and then I'll write a poem for you
while I am sipping a glass of wine

I'll scrub the floors untill they shine
no use today for my cutting gear
while I am sipping a glass of wine
it's raining and I'm sitting here

A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess...
Check out my new website: lookheretitia.fcpages.com (I didn't 'link' this, so it won't take too much space).I

Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2002-03-14 09:11 PM

You're not stuck! Me saw! Me Saw!

Nan

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

2 posted 2002-03-18 08:04 AM

Kewl - I love this piece, Titia.. Your theme is great - Your rhyme scheme formatted well - and almost perfect iambic tetrameter...

I enjoyed muchly, m'friend..

Not A Poet
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since 1999-11-03

Posts 3885
Oklahoma, USA

3 posted 2002-03-18 04:16 PM

Excellent. Cute theme, well developed and it just rolled right through from beginning to end.

Thanks,
Pete

Casidy
Junior Member

since 2002-01-27

Posts 36
The Heart of Texas

4 posted 2002-03-21 11:52 AM

"let the housewife in me free"

I loved this poem!... and I can relate to letting the housewife free, every few days to make the house sparkling and new...

Munda
Member Elite

since 1999-10-08

Posts 3544
The Hague, The Netherlands

5 posted 2002-03-21 03:25 PM

You may be stuck with working in the garden, you're most certainly not stuck with Pantoum!

Titia Geertman
Member Ascendant

since 2001-05-07

Posts 5182
Netherlands

6 posted 2002-03-22 08:25 PM

Thank you all my friends, sorry for this late reply, but I'm a bit busy with my lambs at the moment.

Titia

A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess...
Check out my new website: lookheretitia.fcpages.com (I didn't 'link' this, so it won't take too much space).I

Dr.Moose1
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since 1999-09-05

Posts 3448
Bewilderment , USA

7 posted 2002-03-31 08:32 AM

Titia,
I'm glad you didn't scrub this. It's witty, well thought out, and executed with style.
Doc

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