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SmartChick
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081
On A Journey To The Unknown
0 posted 2002-02-22 10:34 PM

Spring is just around the corner
Time for all the flowers to bloom
Tulips are my favorite flowers
Spring is just around the corner
All of the leaves they will turn green
You can even hear the birds sing
Spring is just around the corner
Time for all the flowers to bloom
By Sue 2-22-02
© Copyright 2002 Sue Graves - All Rights Reserved
Titia Geertman
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since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182
Netherlands
1 posted 2002-02-23 10:13 AM

It is a lovely verse and Nan will love it I'm sure, but for a Triolet, you forgot the rhyming part a bit here.

As is goes: ABaAabAB
Yours goes: ABcdefgAB

Or is it on purpose you choosed the free verse version?

Love it anyway.

Titia

A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess...
Check out my new website: lookheretitia.fcpages.com (I didn't 'link' this, so it won't take too much space).I
SmartChick
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081
On A Journey To The Unknown
2 posted 2002-02-23 02:52 PM

I'm so embarrassed Titia. I'll see if I can fix it.
Titia Geertman
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Netherlands
3 posted 2002-02-23 05:04 PM

Please don't be embarrassed, it's a great verse.

Titia

A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess...
Check out my new website: lookheretitia.fcpages.com (I didn't 'link' this, so it won't take too much space).I
Nan
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since 1999-05-20
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Cape Cod Massachusetts USA
4 posted 2002-02-24 01:40 PM

It IS great, SmartChick... and I love it - Thank you for your wonderful springy verse.  Don't change a thing...

If you want to make another triolet venture, by all means do - the rhyme scheme is right in Titia's response... Looking forward to more...
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