The Mountain Climber + The Warrior = Apocalypse (double poem assignment)

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The Mountain Climber + The Warrior = Apocalypse (double poem assignment)

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

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Winnipeg

0 posted 2001-05-06 11:08 PM

(note - "The Mountain Climber" is a paradelle as well, for bonus marks!

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Apocalypse

The Mountain Climber ~ The Warrior

a mountain climbs the sky ~ the terror glitters on his blade
a mountain climbs the sky ~ so rich with texture, lustr'ous light
as nature gapes in awe ~ he reaches for the stars he's made
as nature gapes in awe ~ he cuts the wonders from the night
in awe, the sky gapes as ~ each prize is pasted to his belt
a mountain, nature climbs ~ beneath the sun, to fry and melt

with arms of fury frost ~ he left his world to fend alone
with arms of fury frost ~ a hero dead, and one anew
and claws of biting wind ~ that clawed his planet to the bone
and claws of biting wind ~ a hero used to be one true
with biting wind and frost ~ the warrior fought for such a cause
of fury, claws of arms ~ but fury clipped his frosty claws

in mankind, cold remorse ~ the answer to the questions is
in mankind, cold remorse ~ so simple, yet so far away
the steel submits to snow ~ while rust forms on that blade of his
the steel submits to snow ~ the war was won within the day
remorse, the snow in steel ~ a form of rain so very rare
submits to cold mankind ~ to decorate the warrior's hair

the sky with mountain cold ~ with snow to line the fall of man
the claws of fury arms ~ as nature, rips our land to shreds
remorse of nature frost ~ the absent force provides a plan
in awe, a biting wind ~ spins fast, and cuts off all our heads,
submits to snow, and climbs ~ the pages of the hist'ry books
as mankind gapes in steel ~ they're buried by the babb'ling brooks

LoveBug

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1 posted 2001-05-07 05:02 PM

*Throws down her pen and paper*
That's it... I QUIT!

Seriously, this is above anything I was able to come up with when I wrote mine. You mastered this challenge extremely easily, but that's no surprise. Beautiful story, also. Are you going to grace us with another before the month is over?

"Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli

Munda
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2 posted 2001-05-07 06:20 PM

Oooohhhhhhhhhhhhhh... LoveBug, I couldn't agree more! This is awesome! Sigh... I better start all over again with mine... Allan this is really very good! I think I'm jealous!