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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Argh... it almost killed me!  I Was The First! For many years I lived along this creek And navigated down-stream quite a bit To find a glimpse of what the end may bring A river wild that put a spell on me One day I packed my bags and got my boat Not meant for trapping beaver or hunt bear But merely satisfying needs within Exploring wildest river known to me What would be at the end of this wild beast? Enormous lake where many rivers meet? And banks much further than the eye can reach? Or would it end at sea to mingle in? So off I was and slept along the way And during night the deer and wolf stopped by Racoon stole food and ruined my supplies But this misfortune could not stop my quest On berries blue and fish I stayed alive A rabbit old occasionally snared My pipe, a good old friend and company While birds sang me a lullaby to sleep The river started flowing faster yet And danger lured around each bend I sailed A rapid strong or whirlpool to avoid But bit by bit I conquered every stream Although I must admit it was a fight With nature of a kind beyond my dreams Inferiority revealed to me By flowing faster on this river wild One day I heard a sound not known to me And for a single moment time stood still A mile ahead a waterfall so grand Of such a beauty I could hardly breath I had to reach the shore to save my butt A test of utmost strength to man and boat My muscles aching, asking for relief Another 15 feet and I'd be safe But then the Indians laid eye on me And poisoned arrows flew around my head My one chance of survival straight ahead By going over falls without an end Niagara Falls is where you find my bones A man's heart broken, story never told! And yet I was the very first you know Discovering these falls y'all come to see But now my bones lay at the bottom of The greatest beauty men has ever seen My spirit bound till somebody believes I was the first discovering the Falls Dear folks, who read this story, set me free By throwing in a dime to break the spell For if you do I'll fin'lly find my peace Niagara Falls at last will set me free |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Wonderful story telling here, Munda! The pentameter is perfect from what I can tell... I really enjoyed this. Thanks for sharing.  "Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli |
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Suzanne Arlene Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 377Ontario, Canada |
I will remember to toss in a dime the next time i am there. Great story Munda.I enjoyed it .You are way braver than I. I could not even attempt it myself. Great job.  Suzanne |
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Romy Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1170Plantation, Florida |
I really enjoyed reading this poem Munda, You're so talented! This is written very well! Debbie |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Munda , Alright ! , so now tell us how you'e planning to fish all those coins out , combine that with the money you got from the safe at the " stute " and run away to some place like the Netherlands ! A-HA! ... Oops ! That's right you're already there . Darn , well I thought I had this figured out ! Doc |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
This is superb - You've told a wonderful story... iambicly...  ... I just want to know which side did those Indians... come from.. the Canadian or the US??... |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
LoveBug & Romy: Thanks gals! It's much appreciated. Suzanne: Thanks for the dime girl! I've got big plans with that money!  Why don't you give the Workshop another try? You're much better and can do a lot more than you realize! Besides, aren't we all here to learn? Well some of us... Doc: Here's the plan...Just before I posted this story I planted some of those Blue Gin Eggs in the area. You know something fishy is bound to hatch from those! As soon as they've collected enough money and with the 'Stute's loot of course, I might just make a trip to the U.S. of A. and track down some of those Stutious loonies... mwahahaha! Well Nan... since I have this "thing" with Canada it had to be Canadian Indians. Besides, did you really think the American Indians were strong enough to shoot all the way to Canada? |
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