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Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant

since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

0 posted 2000-08-08 12:53 PM

Note: The only point of this poetry is fun

Forgive me if I misunderstood the workshop's theme

"EXOTIC - Who Me?"

High above, atop a
forty-inched hill,
a centimetre long,
brown skinned, winged,
working member of
the Formicidae family
guarded the fortress
of his Tribe armed
with sharp antennae.

At the appointed hour,
another centimetre long,
brown skinned, winged,
working member of
the Formicidae family
came to replace him,
to let him take leave
of his duties for the day.

As they exchanged poses,
the newly arrived
sighted, at a wee corner,
a tiny personal note.

Asked he, "what may this be?
The note, "Exotica sighted"
"Biped, huge-200 times large
without wings, without sensors,
covered with strange green
in the middle of its bulk
(I think was a leaf).
It saw our fort from faraway
almost from 300 body lengths away.
I noticed it trembling
looking at our kingdom
and my mighty spear
and later disappear.
It was quite queer
I hereby call it a MAN"

~ Same time, at another place ~

Adam rushed to Eve
rushing in huff.
"Eve", he shrieked
"Where are you?
Did God not tell you
not to eat the fruit?
Look what you have done"

As his sound trailed off,
Eve woke up to his story
and asked "What may it be?"
"What have we done?"
"The fruit that we ate
was so sweet, how could it
possibly cause any wrong?"

To this Adam replied
"I just saw a mound
under an old tree,
very much as the one
beneath which you rest,
where armed was
Lucifer's child Exotica,
With wings and legs,
though just as big
as the finger's nail;
Face full of wrath,
Brown as mud itself
camouflaged in the sand,
eyes with flamed ire
red as this fruit
that you just ate."

Eve, the ever so wise,
said quietly,
"Peace my dear,
God will protect
us from the pest
in His safe arms,
we will calmly rest.
Even if we reach our end,
Greetings to Him we will send,
In the message to God
For the sake of naming
we shall address this
angry pest as an ANT"

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Student's Notes:
EXOTICA: Things that are curiously unusual or excitingly strange: such gustatory exotica as killer bee honey.

ANT:
Important derivatives are: along, end, ante-, advance, anti-, antic, antique, until
Variant form *anto-. Vedanta, from Sanskrit anta, end

ANT:
Any of various social insects of the family Formicidae, characteristically having wings only in the males and fertile females and living in colonies that have a complex social organization

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Hope you all enjoyed...

regards,
sudhir

jbouder
Member Elite

since 1999-09-18

Posts 2534
Whole Sort Of Genl Mish Mash

1 posted 2000-08-09 01:54 PM

Not bad for writing it before you knew the topic.

A little light on the parallelism but, even so, it is still an excellent poem.

Jim

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant

since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

2 posted 2000-08-16 05:03 AM

Jim,
I am extremely thankful for your kind words...

Presently I am now in a spot of bother... been away from this place only for 4 days and I feel like I am lagging behind by 3 weeks.. so I can't promise another poem any more for the Exotica work shop... but I will promise I will give my best try...

regards,
sudhir

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