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Lamp Post- An attempt on Extended Metaphor!
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Purnima Junior Member
since 2000-04-10
Posts 12India |
Nan! Thanks for giving em the oppurtunity. But I am a novice  and here is my try.Don't grade me tough!Lamp Post Everyday I stand still and wait Wondering if someone will contemplate my fate I cannot move and make decision To my life alas there is no conclusion In the prime of my life, I held a lamp I showed directions to all who would tread in the damp They would then know The right way to go People hung posters on me to publicize Some would even, on my usefulness, eulogize I would be pleased to be of some use All in all, I was happy news Fireflies hovered around me Under this post children played in glee many a poets stared at me for inspiration mothers would feed their offsprings with affection slowly I became rusty, yes I had grown old the lamp I held wasn't there anymore I am of no use so people ignore me I just stand here as a symbol of ambiguity I tried comparing lamp post with a man's life! **shrugs** Sorry if it ain't right!! |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
This is a really good theme for an extended metaphor. You've taken the first person point of view, looking at life fromt the point of view of the lamp post. You've shown us the "feelings" that a lamp post would experience, if it were able... (some personification here..  )You express a futility in the tarnished old post's feeling at a loss in its old age.. Perhaps you could take this even a step further by making the lamp post one of those old "gas" lanterns... like something from the last century before we had electricity... Those lamp posts were a modern convenience at one time... then suddenly extinct... I like your approach... Nice concept here... [This message has been edited by Nan (edited 04-18-2000).] |
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Purnima Junior Member
since 2000-04-10
Posts 12India |
Thanks for the suggestions Nan. I am glad you liked it. Purnima |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Well Purnima, I liked it too....lots !  |
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Purnima Junior Member
since 2000-04-10
Posts 12India |
Thanks Munda I had read yr post as well. Purnima |
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