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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Nan....here it is. Sorry it took so long. Watching the leaf floating down the river I sit on the dock and sigh I wonder what kinds of things The leaf has seen and felt over time Once it was part of a beautiful tree And had many friends on the branches Until one day it was blown to the ground A wind came along and tossed it about Finally the leaf landed in the cool water Where it was swept along By the swift current down the river That is how it came to me In many ways my life is parallel To that of the solitary leaf Being carried along by forces unknown As the scenery of life passes by One day the leaf will no longer Be swept away by the rushing water It will end up on the soil Where it will breakdown in composition And that one solitary leaf Will return to Mother Earth Some day it will venture out again ...Born anew and full of life -------------------------------------------------------- Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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dhuron Member
since 2000-03-19
Posts 476 |
I loved this Lone Wolf. Using a Leaf as a parallel to yourself. Wonderful!! The glory of friendship is not the outstretched hand, not the kindly smile, not the joy of companionship; it is the spiritual inspiration that comes to one when he discovers that someone believes in him and is willing to trust him with his friendship." --Ralph Waldo Emerson |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Daniel, Thank you very much. Was not sure on where to start, but today it just came to me. That muse is amazing....there when you are not even looking. Glad that you enjoyed it!!!  Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
great poem! wonderful imaginery... If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves from which evolves the light... Avanti Rao |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
AVANTI, Thank you!! They just came to me one day. Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Yep... The analogy of the leaf to your own life is a great theme for extended metaphor. As a matter of fact, it's one of the most creative ideas I see in this workshop...  You can take it even a step further by omitting the open comparisons to your own life. When your reader can absorb your words, and visualize the leaf floating along its path - and see the comparison to the path of life, you've truly mastered extended metaphor... Nice ride here.. |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Strong wind blows the leaf~ Soaring wild,its path unknown~ Like clueless blur me allow me to write this haiku ")yes,i feel like the leaf too,having absolute no control over the natural elements...but what i like about your poem is that you have included a very positive tone at the end,giving me some hope for the leaf ") |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Lone Wolf I think you did great ! |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Nan, Thank you very much. Just came to me one day and I started writing. I see what you mean by omitting the open comparisons to my own life and allowing the reader to be carried down the stream with the leaf. Thank you!! Glad you enjoyed the ride. Kaile, Thank you for the haiku!! I am touched. You are welcome and I thought the leaf (and I) deserved some hope. Munda, Thanks.....you too!! Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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