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Koon Junior Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 43Singapore |
Why did I look at you Even when I know It means nothing to you? Why did I call your name Even when I know Your feelings are still the same? Why did I touch your face Even when I know I'd be falling from grace? Why did I fall in love with you Even when I know I can never be with you? I want to share All your joys and sorrows But you will never care 'cause I'm just a little sparrow We live in different worlds But I still refuse to see You and I can never be together You were never meant for me. Koon- |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Hmm. Symptoms: Moping as a result of unrequited love. Cure: Well, there isn't one but thats no reason to give up hope. Keep smiling  |
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Duchessofhearts Junior Member
since 2000-01-15
Posts 13 |
Great poem. I have the same problem right now too. Hopefuly we both make it.  |
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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
koon: i think this is a good poem and it expresses your sentiment well, but i just dont get the "sparrow" metaphor... i think you need to either expand upon that image or to compliment it with another metaphor ascribed to your object of affection... such as "you are a mighty hawk/ and I a lowly sparrow"... sincerely, jerome the boy that wants more kool-aid A savage place! as holy and enchanted As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted By woman wailing for her demon-lover! ~Coleridge |
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Koon Junior Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 43Singapore |
Thanx guys for stopping by and reading this poem. I'm really happy and hope too that we'll make it. poetry_kills - well, in the Chinese text, sparrows are often used to personify someone that is of value but not recognized. Thanx for the comment! Koon- |
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