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Teen Poetry #2

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hoppy
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since 2000-01-27

Posts 271

0 posted 2000-01-27 11:59 PM

Ok let's do this the diplimatic way if we must.

Thoughts of You
Thoughts run through my head
I feel so lost, almost dead
I can't control them they're all around
They're takin' over my mind and no comfort can be found
I don't know why they invade like they do
I only know they start with you
Why do they come ony at night
When I lie awake and sit so quiet
They rade my mind each time i think
Afraid to loose them i refuse blink
But in the morning I will wake anew
But I will have lost my thoughts of you
---Written by:Hoppy

11-20-99

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ESP
Member Elite

since 2000-01-25

Posts 2556
Floating gently on a cloud....

1 posted 2000-01-28 05:02 AM

This is a nice poem but typing errors make it just a little bit harder to follow.
Maybe a change in title?

S3NSATION18
Junior Member

since 2000-01-26

Posts 31

2 posted 2000-01-28 08:42 AM

i liked the poem..and i thought of a title...my loss to the morning...just an idea....

Toerag
Member Ascendant

since 1999-07-29

Posts 5622
Ala bam a

3 posted 2000-01-28 03:16 PM

Yo Hoppy! Just a little suggestion....Poems okay, subjects okay...ya may wanna try a tad bit of being humble....ya think?.....LOL

Duchessofhearts
Junior Member

since 2000-01-15

Posts 13

4 posted 2000-01-28 06:18 PM

very nice. I can relate, I can't stop thinking about this guy i met a year ago

[This message has been edited by Duchessofhearts (edited 01-28-2000).]

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