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I Look in the Mirror |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
I look in the broken mirror, and what do I see? I see someone intelligent Someone who thrives on knowlege I see someone kind-hearted Someone always willing to lend a hand I see someone open-minded Someone who accepts others for who they are I see someone who shields himself from life Someone who will not let others close for fear they will hurt him I see someone damaged by the world Someone who has learned to spend his life hiding from the pain I look in the broken mirror, and I see me I look in a new mirror, and what do I see? I see someone who is fat Someone who cannot control his size I see someone with scars on his arms Someone who lashes out at himself when the pain is too much I see someone who is ignored and avoided Someone who is shamed for that not under his control I see someone who drives friends away Someone who smothers them, fearful that they may leave at any time I see someone whos life is being destroyed Someone who feels every insult, but shows no pain I look in a new mirror, and I see the me the world see's [This message has been edited by Mistikman (edited 01-26-2000).] |
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Dean Member
since 1999-11-23
Posts 120Canada |
Very very good!! I can relate to some of the stuff your wrote keep up the good work man!! "Live to love or why live at all" Deano :) |
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Madden18 Junior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 18Connecticut |
Hey Mistikman, this is Seth. I would like to first of all thank you for all your wonderful comments on my work, they are greatly appreciated and secondly, your work is just as good and even better. I like the way you write with your feelings and emotions. Good job on letting your feelings out rather than keeping them inside. I too look foward to reading your work. |
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Oo0ostephanio0oO Member
since 2000-01-19
Posts 194Massachusetts ~USA~ |
This is very well put. I really like this one. You have such beautiful work too. Keep it up. : (:***Stephani***:) "A true friend will always stay a friend whether or not you feel as though the friendship or relationship is about to end." |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Thanks for the positive feedback, and Seth, heh, you dont seem to grasp how good yer stuff really is. You write like someone who has had many years of experience. You even type your replies like someone much older than you must be to be in this forum. I thought this one was a little lackluster compared to my others when I was writing it. I started out trying to make it rhyme but gave up on that after about an hour of coming up with bupkis  This one sounded really bad while I was writing it, but I guess it came out ok.I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion |
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abra-cadabra Member
since 1999-06-21
Posts 75Florissant, Missouri, USA |
Wow. This is really good. I can totally relate to what you wrote. I know how tough life is and all that. But, hey, if you ever need someone to talk to, feel free to e-mail me. k? gas-hed@webtv.net |
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Maitay Member
since 1999-07-16
Posts 158Sisters,OR,USA |
I must say that I agree with all of those who applauded your work. I can totally relate to the way taht I think that the world see's me, and the fear of getting hurt. YOu are a wonderful poet and I look forreward to reading more. ~The price of finding love is to eventually lose it. When I wish on a falling star, I wish not for material goods but to show kindness to others and be content with what the world may offer me~ ~Maitay Mirabel Litton~ |
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