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Chained to a single grain of sand... |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA 
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Two souls grew shackled to the granite, Now find each other in demand. Inside a glass, their spinning planet Dropped like a single grain of sand Into eternity, whose portrait They find inside a moment’s gaze Their eyes, that had the will to forge it, Stand blinded by loving grace. They seek no other, but the one Who has appeared before them then, When in an hourglass they’ve spun Chained to a single grain of sand. |
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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
master: i really like this one... the title drew me in... very interesting idea and very well presented  i'll have to read more of your works when i have some more time... sincerely, jerome the boy with no brain A savage place! as holy and enchanted As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted By woman wailing for her demon-lover! ~Coleridge |
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Dean Member
since 1999-11-23
Posts 120Canada |
All I can say is that your a true poet. Keep up the tight rymes!! "Live to love or why live at all" Deano :) |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
Thank you jerome, glad you liked it. Dean, I'm far from being a true poet, but I'll get there one day, Thanks [This message has been edited by Master (edited 01-25-2000).] |
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Star Fairy 2 Member
since 1999-09-06
Posts 260cerritos, california, usa |
wow! that was an incredible poem... great descriptions... im a little confused with the hidden meanings and symbolisms and such... Regret for things you did maybe tempered by time, regret for things you Didn't do, however, is inconsolable... -------823------- |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Exactly...what a way of showing the feeling..I can relate completely. Beautiful, intriguing, exellent work. I am truly impressed. *Krista Knutson* ~*Like a lion, without fear of the howling pack, Like a gust of wind, ne'er trapped in a snare, Like a lotus blossom, ne'er sprinkled by water, Let me, like a unicorn, in solitude roam.*~ Hymn Of Buddha |
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abra-cadabra Member
since 1999-06-21
Posts 75Florissant, Missouri, USA |
This is absolutely amazing. Beautiful work! I love it! |
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childomine Senior Member
since 2000-01-25
Posts 818st. petersburg, FL |
Beautiful!! I look forward to reading more of your work! |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
Again, thank you everyone for your kind replies. Star Fairy, let me clear it up a bit. In this poem I'm comparing our planet to a grain of sand falling in an hour glass. Two people (lovers) even when their time on earth expires (they fall into eternity), in heaven still seek only each other. The interesting thing with this poem is comparing and contrasting insignificance with greatness (planet with a grain of sand, eternity with a moment's gaze and even two people being chained to a grain of sand). To tell you the truth, when I began writing, I didn't know what I was going to write about, but I guess it came out ok. Thanks again! |
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