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The Jackal
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since 1999-08-13
Posts 426
Springfield, Massachusetts U.S.A

0 posted 2000-01-25 12:17 PM


so im cynical
and im never looking up
nor down
and superficial
was the thorn that sat upon my crown..
and crazy wounded memories
can be my friend
my love..the ugliness within


© Copyright 2000 John Dixon - All Rights Reserved
sweetcollege_girl
Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872
just about where I want to be
1 posted 2000-01-25 12:21 PM


Short poem...but powerfully short  . Good work...keep it up!

--Lavada

 "Superiority to fate is difficult to learn. 'Tis not conferred by any, but possible to earn"--Emily Dickinson-"Superiority of Fate"

poetry_kills
Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549
new orleans
2 posted 2000-01-25 06:36 PM


jackal: powerful piece (despite the brevity)... i can honestly say i used to be very cynical myself (more of a misanthrope actually) and i can identify well... i do hope, however, that the bitterness does not last...

sincerely,
jerome the boy with no brain

 A savage place! as holy and enchanted
As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted
By woman wailing for her demon-lover!
~Coleridge

Dean
Member
since 1999-11-23
Posts 120
Canada
3 posted 2000-01-25 07:50 PM


Very good!! Nothing worng with a short poem and don't know why people even mention that it's short. I like poems like yours they have simple idea and are very clear!!!

 "Live to love or why live at all"
Deano :)


abra-cadabra
Member
since 1999-06-21
Posts 75
Florissant, Missouri, USA
4 posted 2000-01-26 04:52 AM


Good poem. Straight and to the point. Cool!
childomine
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since 2000-01-25
Posts 818
st. petersburg, FL
5 posted 2000-01-26 08:25 AM


Very good poem.  Very powerful!!
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