To a friend (another free-style...scary)

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Teen Poetry #2

To a friend (another free-style...scary)

LoveBug

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since 2000-01-08

Posts 4697

0 posted 2000-01-24 04:06 PM

You always talk about
Him and you
You don’t know how much it hurts me
To sit and listen
And pretend to be happy for you
It’s like salt in an open wound

I see him and you
Sitting together, so happy
While I sit alone, so sad
Do you even notice?
Do you even care?
Do you even know I’m there?

Do you know, that when you’re there
Being so happy with him
When I know I’ll never have the one I love
That I think about quitting
Ending it all
Would you even care?

Or would you just sit some more
With the one you love?
Or think you love...
Before, the answer would be easy
But now, I don’t know
I just don’t know

"To the world you may be one person, but to one person you may be the world"

Mistikman
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since 2000-01-10

Posts 682
San Jose, CA, USA

1 posted 2000-01-24 08:37 PM

Very well done. This style seems to suit you very well, you write very powerfully with it. It is very hard to see the one you want with another. I wish you luck.

I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion

abra-cadabra
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since 1999-06-21

Posts 75
Florissant, Missouri, USA

2 posted 2000-01-25 01:34 AM

Great poem! I can feel the pain in it. You might wanna listen to LeAnn Rimes "Big Deal." Could cheer ya up. It's kinda funny.

Good job on the poem, though.

childomine
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since 2000-01-25

Posts 818
st. petersburg, FL

3 posted 2000-01-26 08:29 AM

Good peom - speaks powerfully of a pain that we all have experienced at some time.

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