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Lacy J
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since 2000-01-18
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0 posted 2000-01-18 01:03 PM

Who are you to tell me
That I can't wear these clothes?
You say they make me look trashy
But how the hell would you know?

Who are you to criticize
The way I fix my hair
Maybe no one else does it this way
Tell me why do you care?

Who are you to decide
The one true love for me
Maybe I'm already in love with him
Did you ever think that could be?

Who are you to wake me
And disinigrate my dreams
My one land of peacefulness
And you ripped it at the seams.

Who are you to convince me
In this world I could never survive
Why don't you stop tormenting me
Go ruin other people's lives.

Who are you to stop me
From walking out that door
I'll make it easy-I'm leaving,
'Cause you are no one anymore.

By: Lacy

© Copyright 2000 Lacy J - All Rights Reserved
Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682
San Jose, CA, USA
1 posted 2000-01-18 05:36 PM

Welcome to passions, and very nice work. I tend to feel that way towards my parents all too often. Family problems suck  

 I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion

since 1999-11-09
Posts 378
California! Yeah! Okay, I'm done now
2 posted 2000-01-18 06:40 PM

I've felt the same.  And Welcome to Passions!  Lovely poem.


 "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness."

"Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things."

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since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada
3 posted 2000-01-18 08:28 PM

Welcome to Passions.

Who am I to tell you?
Is this what you wish to know?
I'm the one that birthed you
And watched you as you have grown.

I'm the one who wiped your nose,
And held you as you cried.
I'm the one that answered,
All the what's that and the whys?

I'm the one that one that kissed your hurts
And bandaged every scrape.
I'm the one you ran up to,
To protect you from your fears.

I'm the one that looks at you,
Growing up too fast.
Feeling like I'm loosing you,
Cause you run so fast.

Please remember, this is my fear,
You lovely child of mine.
Of letting go to see you fall,
To the harshness of this world.

The day this gift was giv'n to me,
The bundle was so small.
I pledged my life and all I have,
To keep you from harms way.

I know not how to raise a teen,
I'm learning as I go.
Teach me what I need to know,
Speak soft, true words to me.

Talk to me and let me know,
That I'm not loosing you.
Show me that not matter what,
The love 'tween us is true.

Just thought I'd give you a parents perspective. It isn't that we want to crowd you or rule you. It is that we do not know how to let go. We need to know that in easing off we are letting you explore who you are and not loosing the child we love so dearly. Try speaking to your parents, not yelling or demanding but talking, listening and communicating. We are only human and we make mistakes, help us find the right way to deal with our children.

Junior Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 20
Paris, Ontario, Canada
4 posted 2000-01-19 11:34 AM

Great poem. It's so easy to get frusterated by parents. Happens to me all the time. Poetry is a great way to let it out, especialy when you have a talent like yours.


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since 2000-01-10
Posts 682
San Jose, CA, USA
5 posted 2000-01-19 12:21 PM

Wow, thats awsome Marilyn   great way to respond to someones poetry.
Kitty-could you use a color other than green for your text? its impossible to read and I had to highlight it to read it.

 I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion

since 2000-01-19
Posts 194
Massachusetts ~USA~
6 posted 2000-01-19 02:23 PM

That was a great poem. I'm not sure what type of postion you are in with your parent(s) or your guardian(s). My father is deceased and all I have is my mother, and if it wasn't for her I wouldn't be who I am today. Our parents are just looking out for us. Just talk to THEM and let them know EXACTLY how you are feeling. They will take what you have to say to heart. Communication is the BEST. Arguments are NOT.  

"A true friend will always stay a friend
whether or not you feel as though the friendship or relationship is about to end."

since 1999-12-02
Posts 443
7 posted 2000-01-19 09:19 PM

Good job Lacy J and Welcome to Passions.  Not much let for me to say so I'll just echo all the comments written above.
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