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0 posted 2000-01-17 05:13 PM

I wrote this for a girl named Jonnie.  What can I say???  She takes my breath away.  I just wish that she knew how I feel and that I had the courage to tell her.  Anyways, here goes...

Your beautiful eyes,
Bluer than any ocean,
Deeperthan any sea.

Just to be loved by you,
To be held in your heart,
For that I plea.

Your flowing blond hair,
Runs down your back like water,
Running down a trickling stream.

To hold you in my arms,
To kiss your soft sweet lips,
Are things that exist only in the sweetest dream.

Your glistening smile,
Sends a rush through my body,
And brightens up my face.

I long to hold you,
In a warm and sweet,
Loving embrace.

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1 posted 2000-01-17 06:30 PM

Good job on the poem.  I wrote one somewhat simmilar to yours.  As far as a title goes,  I could only think of "Cherish Affection". Something you you truly yearn for yet, you can nessisartly have it. Just a suggestion though.
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2 posted 2000-01-17 06:48 PM

*Stands up and claps* i love what youve done with this...and if i may say, she is one lucky girl
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3 posted 2000-01-18 01:18 PM

I go with Jer...but how about Cherished Affection...sounds better. no offense Jer  
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4 posted 2000-01-18 02:09 PM

This is a VERY good poem! I can really relate. Keep up the good work!  

 "To the world you may be one person, but to one person you may be the world"

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5 posted 2000-01-19 12:30 PM

Thats a tight poem!! Keep up the good work up!!

 "Live to love or why live at all"
Deano :)

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6 posted 2000-01-19 12:27 PM

That is a WONDERFUL poem!  I agree with Jer and Sweetcollege_girl on the title (Whichever one you like better, of course!).  I can relate to what you're saying, too.  Keep it up!!

 "Sometimes people care too much. I think it's called love." -Winnie the Pooh

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7 posted 2000-01-19 05:12 PM

Great poem, this girl must be something.

 He has made everything beautiful in its time
Ecclesiastes 3:11


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