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since 1999-08-10
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0 posted 1999-10-13 04:43 PM

She had a problem,
this she knew.
She was depressed,
and angry too.
She saw him,
it was love at first sight.
She was black,
and he was white.
He saw her,
they looked into each others eyes.
What they saw was a surprise.
They went out,
and had so much fun,
they even kissed under the sun.
he told his dad,
I've met a great girl,
shes more precious than a pearl.
he showed his dad her picture,
but wasnt prepared,
for all the anger his father bared.
He said son,
shes black, your white.
He said it doesnt matter,
but his dad said thats not right.
His dad forbid him,
to ever go out with her again,
so he had no choice but to tell her this.
They met at the beach,
there usual place.
She wondered why,
he didnt have a smile on his face.
He looked sad,
like hed been crying for days,
she asked him whats wrong?
He said,
this isnt easy for me to say,
but we have to break up.
I hope you'll be okay.
She tried to talk,
with shock in her voice.
But all he said was-
I have no choice.
She said I understand,
no ones ever loved me before.
He didnt say anything,
cause he thought hed hurt her more.
the next day,
he realized his mistake.
So he bought her a rose,
and went to her house by the lake.
He walked in her room,
and opened the door,
with a smile on his face,
But when he looked up,
he was everything was out of place.
Mirrors were broken,
there was blood everywhere.
Then he focused,
and saw her laying there.
He realized what hed done,
and thought he would die.
how could he do this to someone who he loved so much?
He couldnt think of what else to do,
so he picked up th glass,
and killed himself too.

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Paul Hoekman
since 1999-12-28
Posts 382
Harwinton Ct. U>S>A>
1 posted 2000-03-02 11:37 PM

What a story.
Is this somewhere true?
It is very well written
and even today still unfortunately
alot of the times the existing attitude.
Did you make this up?

Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872
just about where I want to be
2 posted 2000-03-03 11:40 AM

Also another sad story..but wonderfully written..You have a good talent. So sad, adn again, so beautiful...a true story about the hurt love causes between different races..been there, done that. only we are both still alive, and good friends  

stay cool


 "For every beauty, there is an eye somewhere to see it.
For every truth, there is an ear somewhere to hear it
For every love, there is a heart somewhere to receive it".--Ivan Panin

Danny Holloway
Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034
Tulsa, OK
3 posted 2000-03-03 11:50 AM

Sad story for sure.  There are some things this world is still not ready for.  Did you see the movie "A Bronks Tale"?  It was about a white boy and black girl.  It told of an interesting way to tell if a girl would be a great partner or just so-so.
Anyway, interesting story.

Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713
4 posted 2000-03-04 07:35 PM

Beautiful story and so well written, it's so sad that alot of prejudices still exist today.  LoL tracie  

 Keep all the windows of your mind open
Anne Rooks

Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528
North Carolina
5 posted 2000-03-04 09:44 PM

So this is like a *Romeo and Juliet* scenario right? The story was well told and the rhymes worked really well. Very sad that some people can't look beyond their unenlightened views of what's right and in the process hurt the ones they are supposed to love.
since 2000-02-12
Posts 238

6 posted 2000-03-05 03:43 AM

this is excellent! as i read it i felt my eyes watering something terrible. this is great! very heart wrenching.
good job!


Ack! my eyes are still all blurry. i'm a sucker for sad poetry

Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850
In the space between moments
7 posted 2000-03-05 10:06 PM

Stunning.  What a tale you've woven here.  Deeply sad and moving work.  

 *Krista Knutson*

"Every moment marked with apparitions of your soul...." ~*Sarah McLachlan- Do What You Have To Do*~

since 2000-02-06
Posts 110
Clarksville, TN, USA
8 posted 2000-03-05 11:30 PM

Good job, I really liked this poem.  The story it told is sad but very true.  Racism is still around today. My own father would be like the boy's father, though I could care less about color.

Again, great poem, keep up the good work.

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