Teen Poetry #2 |
I miss you |
nicnac8 Junior Member
since 1999-07-28
Posts 46New York, N.Y. USA |
I miss you much. I miss your soft, gentle touch. I miss the happiness we've shared. I walking around you bare. I miss playing video games. I miss it when you'd say my name. ]I miss all your silly, harmless lies. I miss how u used to hold and comfort me,when i'd cry. I miss your beautiful brown eyes. I miss the way you'd caress my thighs. I miss those soft, full lips. I miss the way we used to kiss. I miss you rubbing my breasts. I miss laying on your chest. I miss being together,late at night. I miss the way you made my days bright. I miss our fights. I miss you, because you're out of sight. I miss planning our lives together. I miss believing that we'd be forever. I miss it when you'd call. I miss giving you my all. I miss fantasizing about a diamond ring. I miss everything. I miss you so much, lately. I miss you so much, baby. I miss you so much, now that your gone. I'm gonna miss missing you, because now i must move on. |
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cougaryouth Junior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 25 |
Wow this is one of the best poems yet! I have to congradulate you on this one. This touched my heart deeply and I cant beleive nobody has replied to it, but they are missing out, please by all means keep up the poems like this! |
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destiny502 Member
since 1999-11-23
Posts 57OH |
nice poem! very sad but touching too, i would feel just about the same way if my boyfriend was gone. is this from your own experience? keep it up..its really good. Always, Heather |
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Astraea Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 378California! Yeah! Okay, I'm done now |
Wow. This is precisely how I felt when my relationship with my boyfriend broke apart, only I haven't gotten part the last line yet. Nevertheless, lovely poem and very strongly put. ~Astraea "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness." "Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things." |
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Jer Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 443USA |
Such dexterous writer you are. The poem was good. I can feel the sadness radiating from it. |
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nicnac8 Junior Member
since 1999-07-28
Posts 46New York, N.Y. USA |
I thanku all 4 taking the time out to read my poem and replying. Yes, part of it is from an old relationship. Writing poetry just helps me cope w/ break-ups. I believe that poetry is very therapeutic and that it is a positive way to express your feelings.Astraea I hope this poem helps u. Jer thanx 4 the compliment, although I had 2 pull out the dictionary 2 find out what dextrous means. Remember: "It's better to have loved and lost, than to have never loved at all." "All hearts are broken, beware those who never pick up the pieces." ~nicnac8 |
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Tamma
since 2000-01-17
Posts 794In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV |
i love it!!! this actually reminds me of my boyfriend, who, is now in Connecticut, while im stuck here in West Virginia but i kno hell always love me, no matter where i go ~~~Tamma~~~ |
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Dean Member
since 1999-11-23
Posts 120Canada |
Thats a ****ing sweet poem keep up the good ****ing work!!!! "Live to love or why live at all" Deano :) |
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Jer Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 443USA |
Oh.... I'm sorry. I thought you would have known it meant skillful. Ohhh.. well as long as you know what I was talking about. |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Hey, nice work! It sounds like how I would feel if I ever got that someone and lost him... Tamma, I am also stuck in WV! "To the world you may be one person, but to one person you may be the world" |
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angel6917 Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 478WI |
i love the way you can put your feelings into words. i felt that way when i broke up with one of my old boyfriends, too |
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nicnac8 Junior Member
since 1999-07-28
Posts 46New York, N.Y. USA |
Hey, thanku evry1, I didn't expect this many replies,actually i didn't expect any. Any way i really appreciate it. That's cool Tamma, u and ur boyfriend must really b in love. Thanx Dean, I think. Jer- I figured it out, It's good 2 use big words - it shows ur intelligence. Im going 2 use that word - dextrous, hmmmm. And I love the quote at the end of ur reply, LoveBug- id like to be some1's world. |
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Kitty Junior Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 20Paris, Ontario, Canada |
Wow, your poem totally discribs how I feel right now, it just about made me cry. Awsome work. He has made everything beautiful in its time Ecclesiastes 3:11 Kitty |
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Oo0ostephanio0oO Member
since 2000-01-19
Posts 194Massachusetts ~USA~ |
This was great. It made me teary eyed. It also makes me think about my boyfriend and I. Everything has been awful lately, but I don't want to break up for the reasons you listed in your poem. I'm just so afraid. Stuff like this can really encourage someone that they do need to move on. I just wish I had the strength, but I'm too scared to have to deal with those feelings. (:***Stephani***:) "A true friend will always stay a friend whether or not you feel as though the friendship or relationship is about to end." |
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abra-cadabra Member
since 1999-06-21
Posts 75Florissant, Missouri, USA |
I love this poem. Sounds like something I would've written after I broke up with my boyfriend. Beautiful work. |
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nicnac8 Junior Member
since 1999-07-28
Posts 46New York, N.Y. USA |
Hey, thanx evry1. I really appreciate the replies.I had no idea that 1 of my poems could actually make a person get ready to cry.Stefanie- i hope that evry thing works out with u and ur boyfriend, and if not, just remember: "It is better to have loved and lost, than to have never loved at all." ~nicnac8~ |
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