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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
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Thanks to Jer for the title suggestion! I look into those eyes That will never look in mine I wish that you would look at me Just once, just one time But I know this will never be Maybe it isn’t God’s will That I will be happy this soon But I go on praying still Praying those eyes would look into mine That they would search my soul I wish this more than anything else This would make my life whole I look into those beautiful eyes Those beautiful eyes of blue I would give my heart, my soul For just one glimpse from you Sometime, I think I see those eyes Looking deep into mine And I’m filled with happiness Knowing the love I’ll find And then, I awake and know That none of this was real And no words written can describe The disappointment and pain I feel But now, I live from one dream to the next I live for this perfect land Where you look at me with those beautiful eyes But all dreams crumble into sand And then, I’ll be back where I was before Praying and wishing in vain For something that I can’t have And going through all this pain But, when I can’t take it anymore And when all hope is gone, it seems I just wait for those precious moments I sleep I live my life for my dreams ~LoveBug~ "To the world you may be one person, but to one person you may be the world" |
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peanogrl83 Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 202 |
Oh wow! I really like this poem! Good job! Is it speaking from experience? Vreni |
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Nimue New Member
since 1999-12-12
Posts 3Washington, DC |
Wow, this is a beautiful poem! I really love the idea of it, and I think I can identify. ~ Nimue "Touch passion when it comes to you. As rare enough as it is, don't walk away when it calls you by name." ~Marcus Cole, Babylon 5 |
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Jer Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 443USA |
Hey... You took my title advice. You got me blushing. You already know I think highly of this poem and rest of your work. As always, great job. |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
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Hey! Thanks for the nice comments, everyone! Yes, almost all of my work is taken from my own life. "To the world you may be one person, but to one person you may be the world" |
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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
lovebug: very good work... you manage to express with simple yet beautiful imagery the experience of love unreturned... i have only one question... in the parts where you talk about "looking into the eyes that will never look into yours" where [or how] are you looking into those eyes? is it in your dreams? the end left me thinking so, but the beginning left me believing that you were staring at a photograph of the person as you wrote... just wondered  sincerely, **jerome the boy whose brain got left out in the rain and nobody bothered to dry it off when they put it back in |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
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Poetry, when I say that I'm looking into his eyes, it means that I'm really looking into his eyes when no one is looking, not even him. I'm not sure if that's really looking into someone's eyes, but I think it is. It's as close as I'll get, anyway... "To the world you may be one person, but to one person you may be the world" |
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cougaryouth Junior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 25 |
Wow this is my favorite poem yet. I really enjoyed this one. It sounds like something I would write. Keep it up and so far you are my favorite poet in here yet. |
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