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Misty
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since 1999-08-01
Posts 121
USA

0 posted 2000-01-10 06:39 PM


I Was On The Top!

Life was perfect, like a newly oiled machine!
It was all running smooth.
I felt special, I was a someone.
I was the happiest I had ever been in my whole life.
I was Queen, on top of the world,
you were the one holding me up.
Then one day that all changed,
you drifted away,
you must of lost interest
or I was just a big burden on your shoulders.
Because you dropped me just like that.
As you walked off you didn't even look back,
not even a glance over your shoulder to see if I was ok.
No condolence what so ever.
There was no warning that you'd be leaving,
not even a sign of a breakup or even a goodbye.
That's when I hit rock bottom,
I hit reality.
You were no longer here to hold me up.
I finally woke up from my happy dream
to the fact that you were only a dream.
And again Im just another face in the crowd.

©Misty Brendle

[This message has been edited by Misty (edited 01-10-2000).]

© Copyright 2000 Misty - All Rights Reserved
Jer
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since 1999-12-02
Posts 443
USA
1 posted 2000-01-10 06:43 PM


I think just about every person on this earth has felt this way one time or another. It's great topic to write about and I think it's the first time I have read one about this subject on this form. Good job.
Star Fairy 2
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 260
cerritos, california, usa
2 posted 2000-01-10 09:50 PM


very good
good flow
expressive too
very nice

*sorry i am at a loss for words?

 Don't Fall.. Rise in Love
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Misty
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since 1999-08-01
Posts 121
USA
3 posted 2000-01-15 11:47 AM


Thanks for the replies!

 ¬©Misty
For more Poems bye Misty GO TO:
http://www.geocities.com/Paris/Arc/1644

"You died a failure because you never tried!"


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