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Vball Chickie1624
since 2000-05-14
Posts 116
New York

0 posted 2000-06-04 09:51 PM

The tear was born in my eye,
When I found out that you did lie.

The tear began to fall,
No wonder you never did return my call.

The tear rolled down my cheek,
The thought of losing you made me weak.

The tear fell to my lip,
And in my heart I felt a big rip.

More tears began to fall down my face,
At an even more rapid pace.

I've never felt like that before,
Did I just like you or was it more?

The song from you explained it all,
So why did the tears continue to fall?

Did you make your decision too fast?
If we were together would it last?

I knew I would never hurt you,
That's something I couldn't do.

The last year was born in my eye,
It fell to my lip where it then did die.

I wrote this poem last summer.  I was in a love triangle type thing and the guy chose the other girl, and then he wrote a song and sent it to me and in it he said he loved me and wanted to be with he broke up with that other girl and stupidly i went out with him..and he ended up cheating on me with the other girl...but oh well loved and learned  

 "Dream what you want to dream; go where you want to go; be what you want to be, because you have only one life and one chance to do all the things you want to do."

"The role of a writer is not to say what we can all say, but what we are unable to say."
- Anais Nin

"Follow your own heart, not others."

© Copyright 2000 Danielle DuFour - All Rights Reserved
since 1999-08-25
Posts 176
1 posted 2000-06-05 12:03 PM

Sometimes it's a hard lesson to learn to love and then leave it behind. This poem was very touching and good feelings behind it.
Good job.


 "Poetry is the music of the souls, and above all, of great and feeling souls."

Jeremy Halstead
Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A
2 posted 2000-06-05 02:28 AM

"I've never felt like this before.
Did I just like you, or was it more?"
that's my fav line of the poem.  It was really honest and it seems like you know the answer to that question now.  I'm glad to know that you've learned something and grown from the experience.  A mistake is only a tragedy if you don't learn from it.  

Jeremy Halstead


Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932
3 posted 2000-06-05 10:40 PM

Wonderfully put! A must read for anyone who has experienced love and lost. and those who haven't a warning not to fall too fast too soon! I'm glad to hear you're moving on with your life! =0) you can do better I'm sure! Keep up the writing! Love Always ~*~Jessica~*~
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