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Best Friends forever!!!!!!
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Best Friends forever!!!!!! |
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SwEEt&iNnOcCeNt Junior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 45 |
not knowing how things would turn out, i took a chance and introduced my self to you, and you politely excepted my introduction.. years went by and we became closer friends, i knew everything about you and you knew everything about me... you knew i would do anything i could for you and i knew inturn you would do the same. the day came when we went off to college you got excepted to one and me another now were miles apart and can't see each other as often as we want to. but i know you'll always be their.. like you were before.. from now until forever... you'll always be my best friend that i love and will hold dearly to my heart... ~*~*~*~*~ LoL this one stinks!!!!!! sorry people haven't been here for along time.. been studding for my finals.. sorry i'll get better i promise(hope).. well i hope you respond... hi bec...!!! |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
You've got a nice grasp on your format and rythm and stuff. Your meaning is clear too. I like it. I guess the only bit of constructive critisism I have for ya is that it seemed a little more like a letter than a peom... but some are meant to be like that, so I'll give ya some slack..hehehe j/k. I wanna see some more. Check out my stuff, would ya? Jeremy D. Halstead |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Don't be so hard on yourself,that was good. I can relate. Keep writing! -Bel |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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