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Teen Poetry #2

Everything I Love about You

emma
New Member

since 2000-05-31

Posts 8

0 posted 2000-05-31 02:29 PM

No matter what you do
You will never stop my love for you!
I love the way you look at me
I love the way you scream when you see a bee!

I love it when you stare
I love how you do your hair
I love it when you hold me in your arm
I love it when you protect me from harm
but there is one thing I hate about you
its that you wont let me show you that my love is true

Jeremy Halstead
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A

1 posted 2000-06-01 01:58 AM

Wow, nice job. Short, but sweet. I can really tell yer really into this person. A little advice...never eat yellow snow.

Jeremy Halstead
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A

2 posted 2000-06-01 01:58 AM

Wow, nice job. Short, but sweet. I can really tell yer really into this person. A little advice...never eat yellow snow.

amazon_lover
Member

since 2000-04-09

Posts 491
Dublin,Ireland

3 posted 2000-06-02 04:04 PM

Hi Emma
You've captured my emotions almost. I love everything about her.

Sincerely
A_L

LIL' Lou
Junior Member

since 2000-06-02

Posts 29
OKlahoma

4 posted 2000-06-04 07:38 PM

Emma!!!

Hay babe even though we are bfs i got to say if i didnt know you i would think you are the most sweetest person in the world!!!!
Luv LOu

StarPryncess17
Senior Member

since 2000-05-31

Posts 932
Colorado

5 posted 2000-06-04 07:49 PM

WOnderful way to get the point across!! I love it! Keep writing! Thge last line is my favorite! LoL Love Always ~*~Jessica~*~

ILoveSrfrs
Member

since 1999-11-14

Posts 69
California

6 posted 2000-06-04 09:13 PM

Hey I have to agree with everyone here - this is a great poem.
If I had one suggestion...I would replace the line about a bee with something more that has to do with how you feel, unless of course its from an experience - then explain it. Just some suggestions - keep the good work coming! marissa

LIL' Lou
Junior Member

since 2000-06-02

Posts 29
OKlahoma

7 posted 2000-06-05 07:02 PM

Hay hun!
So i wonder if this is about ****?
Well i luv you and your poems keep it up!

Love is like a rainbow,
Each color has a differnt meaning.
Lauren Lou

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