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The Jackal Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 426Springfield, Massachusetts U.S.A |
this airplane reeks of dust and sin we can never take off like this again we're just merely human..we die did you know? i find its wiser..to never ask why my speaking error..overcomes my imperfect eye is there something you came to see? the sun the trees the bumble bees..maybe walk through the shade and sit in the light..thank god for giving you another day of sight but thats just a little picture..that is not real i know you see..i helped cut down that tree...i killed the light i rearrainged the view..come now, you didnt think it was ever really meant to suit you..and guess what..i know what your thinking..i know what your dreaming because i lied when i said..i didnt enjoy taking it from you..enjoyed every minute..it stood in my way..but ill be fair..ill give you the night..i just want each and every day..the sun was mine..everything you had has expired..love to tell you..your out of time..not like you ever really mattered ,i almost forgot you were ever there ..your right as you whisper..that life was sublime "you can have my isolation..you can have the hate that it brings you can have my absence of faith..you can have my everything" "so impressed with all you do..tried so hard to be like you..flew too high and burnt the wing..lost my faith in everything" "I am too connected to you to Slip away, to fade away. Days away I still feel you Touching me, changing me, And considerately killing me." The Jackal |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
Wow...this is an interesting and confusing piece. I must say I don't really understand it. I get the ending and the whole meaning of the poem, but what about the lines in between? Is there an explaination? Salma "Not all the answers lie within your realm or mine, they lie within the borders." |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I'm with Salooma, I'd really like to know what you were aiming for here..it's an interesting poem, with a 'beat' like a rap song.  |
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